Oh Life!
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Comment from lancellot
I'm not quite sure, but I think you may be say all this bright and clear are seen as good things, while we ban those things obscure our vision, like blots of ink, blasts of dirt or simply the dreaded darkness of night and thankfully it doesn't last lone.
This is only my guess. I could be wrong. The lines are open for interpretation.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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I'm not quite sure, but I think you may be say all this bright and clear are seen as good things, while we ban those things obscure our vision, like blots of ink, blasts of dirt or simply the dreaded darkness of night and thankfully it doesn't last lone.
This is only my guess. I could be wrong. The lines are open for interpretation.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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T y. Ur wisdom reveals. ALD
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
I have absolutely no idea what this is all about. Wham! Bam! But I like your style and rhymes and rhythms, Sounds musical when read aloud. Creative. Thanks for sharing!
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I have absolutely no idea what this is all about. Wham! Bam! But I like your style and rhymes and rhythms, Sounds musical when read aloud. Creative. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
Comment from Indie Skreet
have not a cats arse idea what this one's about, but it was nice and short, how I like them and as I said I think before, pays big bucks. Maybe I'll get enough of them to knock you off the front page lol, Indie
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have not a cats arse idea what this one's about, but it was nice and short, how I like them and as I said I think before, pays big bucks. Maybe I'll get enough of them to knock you off the front page lol, Indie
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from gazzagodbod
Always well written and presented but I think your to clever for me understanding them hurts my brain trying lol thanks gazzagodbod
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Always well written and presented but I think your to clever for me understanding them hurts my brain trying lol thanks gazzagodbod
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from Allison78
This is such an interesting poem you have written. The second line is especially fun to read. Your syllable count is perfect, fantastic job!
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This is such an interesting poem you have written. The second line is especially fun to read. Your syllable count is perfect, fantastic job!
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from candi lester
Well done............
a well thought out poem............
did good on sticking to the poems rules............
thanks for sharing with us...............
SWEETNESS FOREVER
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Well done............
a well thought out poem............
did good on sticking to the poems rules............
thanks for sharing with us...............
SWEETNESS FOREVER
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Great use of alliteration in the middle line. I like the upbeat ending to this. Your contrast of light and dark is excellent ~ Debbie
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Great use of alliteration in the middle line. I like the upbeat ending to this. Your contrast of light and dark is excellent ~ Debbie
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
Comment from TonyD
I get the idea that light is good and the "damn black" is not welcomed. It is just as well that it is dark for only a few hours.
Tony
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I get the idea that light is good and the "damn black" is not welcomed. It is just as well that it is dark for only a few hours.
Tony
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from EMB
This is an interesting piece. I'm gonna take it as one of motivation, fending off dark moods and staying positive despite the darkness. The alliteration in this was awesome.
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This is an interesting piece. I'm gonna take it as one of motivation, fending off dark moods and staying positive despite the darkness. The alliteration in this was awesome.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
Comment from Halfree
Have no idea what I just read. I see the words and they might have a connection somehow, flew right past me. I do enjoy poetry and I am open to different style and meter. Will read more, think this one falls a bit flat.
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Have no idea what I just read. I see the words and they might have a connection somehow, flew right past me. I do enjoy poetry and I am open to different style and meter. Will read more, think this one falls a bit flat.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
