Comment from Tina McKala

Excellent

interesting piece... i'm really impressed by its flow, very good reading pace and rhythm, which is not so common for 5-7-5. good job.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for the review

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

The message is clear and to the point. Nothing comes to a sleeper but a dream. You must get out and labor so the fruits of our labor can be made manifest by our actions.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

Yes, you are correct. If we want to survive, we have to work for it. So many people is just content and will sit back and let others work for them.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from barkingdog

Excellent

This is one to think about. Hunger is natural but what of those that starve because their land is depleted, drought rules or there are too many mouths to feed with a sparse harvest?

They would gladly work for food.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from Norbanus

Excellent

Unity is what I see
entwined as one infinity
deny at will divinity
where'er you place on sea or shore
you pack your share for evermore

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for poetic review

Comment from Mountainstar2

Excellent

Well this Poem is very short and to the point. It is all that is required here...
Good on it's own and so very true. Nothing to take away or add for it great on it's own. Until the next read and review, simply write-on...Mountainstar2...

 Comment Written 22-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice professional review
sorry for the late

Comment from Beatlegirl61

Excellent

A very brilliant senyru and the choice of wordage and the arrangement were grand!
I enjoyed this one and again, love structured poetry. This was imaginative as well as creative and thought provoking too! Everything a good poem has!
Take care and be well...Carol ::)

'Beatle' quote today:
"You'll have to have them all pulled out after the savoy truffle..."
(George song about rotten teeth!!)

 Comment Written 21-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for fantastic professional review
sorry for the late

Comment from RaymondJohn

Excellent

One of the better Haiku offerings I've read. You have the right meter, exhortation, movement and instruction. You also have a nice bit of humor in it, too. Best. Ray.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS FOR THIS LITERARY REVIEW, APPRECIATION WITH ORDER OF MERIT I DO APPRECIATE.

Comment from mhb28365

Excellent

Hey, nothing wrong with 5-7-5. You make a nice point. What more can we ask than that? Sometime we get so caught up in looking at the tree, we cannot understand the forest.

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS FOR THIS REVIEW WITH REFERENCE TO THE POINT I DO APPRECIATE.

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

I liked this piece of poetry is was short and to the point
and I found it to be so very poetic
this was my p[leasure to read and review... John

 Comment Written 19-Aug-2006

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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006

THANKS FOR THIS SOFT POETIC REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE.