Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Hungry?"Experiences of living
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Comment from words
Hungry? Natural,
For survival, you must toil,
Work; birds, ants and all.
Ah, but do the lilies of the field toil ... I think not.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Hungry? Natural,
For survival, you must toil,
Work; birds, ants and all.
Ah, but do the lilies of the field toil ... I think not.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from donaldww
Hey Al,
Yes, everyone works in order to eat and survive. Most informative poetry. I think you're headed to the top of the charts.
It's like Fanstory, where everyone must review in order to post their own works, or run up their credit card.
Thanks for sharing your wisdom.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Hey Al,
Yes, everyone works in order to eat and survive. Most informative poetry. I think you're headed to the top of the charts.
It's like Fanstory, where everyone must review in order to post their own works, or run up their credit card.
Thanks for sharing your wisdom.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for professional review
Comment from Neelam Sangwai
One looks at ones best when one is toiling for the hunger. Some general pics are birds catching fish, bees collecting honey, or any worker working with his heart.. Compact words with an insight. Neelam
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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One looks at ones best when one is toiling for the hunger. Some general pics are birds catching fish, bees collecting honey, or any worker working with his heart.. Compact words with an insight. Neelam
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
I think nowadays, not too many would survive if they had to grow their own food, tend the weeds, fertilize their food plots properly, and all the other needs, such as pesticide treatments or organic work, necessary to keep their food supply going. Many would starve to death. I suppose toil can be considered working in an office.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I think nowadays, not too many would survive if they had to grow their own food, tend the weeds, fertilize their food plots properly, and all the other needs, such as pesticide treatments or organic work, necessary to keep their food supply going. Many would starve to death. I suppose toil can be considered working in an office.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for excellent review
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You are welcome. MN :)
Comment from October21
Excellent 5/7/5 poem. Correct syllable count.
As you use the word "natural", perhaps the background of the poem could be green as natural things are green. Fantastic rhyming. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Excellent 5/7/5 poem. Correct syllable count.
As you use the word "natural", perhaps the background of the poem could be green as natural things are green. Fantastic rhyming. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for fantastic review
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
This is a really deep 5-7-5... So much thought is provoked by these 17 syllables! This is an outstanding example of this form of poetry. :)
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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This is a really deep 5-7-5... So much thought is provoked by these 17 syllables! This is an outstanding example of this form of poetry. :)
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a good piece of writing in the 5-7-5 format. Hunger is the driving force of humanity and all other forms of life. you captured it well. cheers
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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This is a good piece of writing in the 5-7-5 format. Hunger is the driving force of humanity and all other forms of life. you captured it well. cheers
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from vkmack
I like this structure, and I find the fact that you've chosen to share a fundamental truth very appealing. It is natural to be hungry and a natural to toil to assuage that hunger. Thanks for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I like this structure, and I find the fact that you've chosen to share a fundamental truth very appealing. It is natural to be hungry and a natural to toil to assuage that hunger. Thanks for sharing your work.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from Black_Oxygen
Hungry? Natural,
For survival, you must toil,
Work; birds, ants and all.
With very few words, this poetry speaks a powerful
truth. No photo is necessary; the words are ample.
Thank Your for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Hungry? Natural,
For survival, you must toil,
Work; birds, ants and all.
With very few words, this poetry speaks a powerful
truth. No photo is necessary; the words are ample.
Thank Your for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a five seven five that reminds us all that the days of laurel sitting are over and that each must pass muster daily to deserve his/her cup of gruel at the end of the day.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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This is a five seven five that reminds us all that the days of laurel sitting are over and that each must pass muster daily to deserve his/her cup of gruel at the end of the day.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
