Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Hungry?"Experiences of living
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Comment from visionary1234
well at least this one I 'get' dear - maybe I'm just thick. Ok - we all have to work for a living - got it. But what are your feelings about that? :)S
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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well at least this one I 'get' dear - maybe I'm just thick. Ok - we all have to work for a living - got it. But what are your feelings about that? :)S
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
Comment from allborn66
This is an interesting poem. I like the theme of working, and how you expressed it. I love the word choice. It has a nice flow.
Barbara
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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This is an interesting poem. I like the theme of working, and how you expressed it. I love the word choice. It has a nice flow.
Barbara
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hello, Poet
I enjoyed your short poem this evening about work.
Indeed. We must all work to survive.
If I had one suggestion it would be to change out Work in line three for something else that has to work. Toil and work seem redundant, and given the very few words in the poem, each one has to be effective.
Ray
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Hello, Poet
I enjoyed your short poem this evening about work.
Indeed. We must all work to survive.
If I had one suggestion it would be to change out Work in line three for something else that has to work. Toil and work seem redundant, and given the very few words in the poem, each one has to be effective.
Ray
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for wonderful suggestive review
Comment from Terror2s
If only I limited my hunger for survival. How trim and fit I would be! Nice job of sharing thoughts on this topic with minimal words that invoke thoughtfulness. T2
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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If only I limited my hunger for survival. How trim and fit I would be! Nice job of sharing thoughts on this topic with minimal words that invoke thoughtfulness. T2
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for wonderful review
Comment from isurp
I really enjoyed your 5-7-5 about how we all must toil. It reminds me of the verse that states, 'Go to the ant, thou sluggard." On your background it looks like the word [dimensions] was cut off. -Steve
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I really enjoyed your 5-7-5 about how we all must toil. It reminds me of the verse that states, 'Go to the ant, thou sluggard." On your background it looks like the word [dimensions] was cut off. -Steve
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from rjuselius
"Hungry? Natural,
For survival, you must toil,
Work; birds, ants and all."
a profound piece of poetry and food for thought!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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"Hungry? Natural,
For survival, you must toil,
Work; birds, ants and all."
a profound piece of poetry and food for thought!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good 5/7/5 form
Good use of question to draw the reader in
I like the proximate rhyme of toil/all
and you convey a message that's hard to argue with - we all have to work to survive and nourish ourselves, even the birds and ants know this
Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Your poem is in good 5/7/5 form
Good use of question to draw the reader in
I like the proximate rhyme of toil/all
and you convey a message that's hard to argue with - we all have to work to survive and nourish ourselves, even the birds and ants know this
Brooke
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for wonderful review
Comment from closetpoetjester
Hooray. One that finally makes sense to me. This relates to every living creature man, animal, insect, bird...we must all toil and work hard to hang in there and survive.
We only get OUT of life what we put IN to it.
Kind of like our poetry...This one was quite good and I definitely think this is good advice to put in the Book for Mankind. Good luck.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Hooray. One that finally makes sense to me. This relates to every living creature man, animal, insect, bird...we must all toil and work hard to hang in there and survive.
We only get OUT of life what we put IN to it.
Kind of like our poetry...This one was quite good and I definitely think this is good advice to put in the Book for Mankind. Good luck.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for honest humane review
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
This is very good and looks yummy to the tummy. Yes, we have to fight bugs, etc. even to have good food. great job. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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This is very good and looks yummy to the tummy. Yes, we have to fight bugs, etc. even to have good food. great job. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from muezza56
another interesting and unusual and original style of writing,again in the 5-7-5 style although it does seem unfair that this writer is paying his way to the top of the listings, the irony of which is his examination of human nature and it's various faults
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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another interesting and unusual and original style of writing,again in the 5-7-5 style although it does seem unfair that this writer is paying his way to the top of the listings, the irony of which is his examination of human nature and it's various faults
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for professional review
