Comment from Black_Oxygen

Excellent

This is a narrative that needs to be read more than
once. The twists and turns can seem to be traveling
at light speed. Though, it did hold my interest
from start to finish. Thank You for sharing.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from GratefullyRecovering

Exceptional

Wow, again, very beautiful... The entire thing flows beautifully. I love the passion and the way it's written. You truly write masterpieces!

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review with highest rating

Comment from Neelam Sangwai

Excellent

Its lengthy, but worth reading and appreciating. Good content and Good message. The internal pattern adds the beauty even no rhyming. With regards -Neelam

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from wanderlost

Excellent

The broken nature of this poem contributes ironically to the flow. it is a good piece, and conveys its point well. very interesting.
Wanderlost

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for good review

Comment from donaldww

Excellent

words are like leaves and where they most abound
much fruit of sense beneath is rarely found
such laboured nothings, in so strange a style
amaze th' unlearned, and make the learned smile
-AP

Thanks for sharing and contributing!

Cheers,
DW

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for excellent professional review

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

So very true, we can't take things with us when we die. I wonder why we have to worry so much about them when we are alive. Nicely written poem.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from jaeladarling

Excellent

I like the structure of this piece, with a proclamation first and then an explanation. The deep thoughts contained within make this a great read. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice review

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, alcreator, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about leaving everything behind when you die, someone else will enjoy the fruits of your labor. did you mean sealed in history beyond our ground instead of or ground?

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for professional review

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

This is a wonderful written poem, It's quite sad that we don't have a long lie span and unfortunately don't get to enjoy all that life has to offer, It would be great to experience all of it, I mean beyound our own planet, the seen and unfor seen.

Great job
Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for excellent professional review

Comment from MidnightWriter4U

Excellent

And His creation will one day see His face. From dust ye came and unto dust ye shall return. Store up your treasures in Heaven and not on the earth. This is a wonderful poem of showing what really matters. None can take any earthly treasure with them. Great write!

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013

thanks for nice professional review

reply by MidnightWriter4U on 19-Apr-2013

You're welcome. MN :)