Time Before Time
a 150-word story11 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
The only problem with these timemachines is the running it takes LOL An amusing flash fiction story Bill and the two treadmill theory works well. Good luck in the contest'cheers
valda
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2025
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The only problem with these timemachines is the running it takes LOL An amusing flash fiction story Bill and the two treadmill theory works well. Good luck in the contest'cheers
valda
Comment Written 01-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2025
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Thank you, Valda, for giving this a look.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
You are hilarious, short sweet and that is how you get me to exercise.. not:) "So we travel through time just like there was no theory. We just go forward."
"Yes. Now, however, with this time machine and that time machine," pointing at the two similar treadmill-looking devices, "we can alter the passage by one minute either way." " Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings,
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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You are hilarious, short sweet and that is how you get me to exercise.. not:) "So we travel through time just like there was no theory. We just go forward."
"Yes. Now, however, with this time machine and that time machine," pointing at the two similar treadmill-looking devices, "we can alter the passage by one minute either way." " Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings,
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Iza
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Certainly a fun one here, Sir Bill -- great for a grin (and a chance to continue into infinity, yeah?)! ;) Thanx so much for sharing your pen and best of luck in the contest!! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Certainly a fun one here, Sir Bill -- great for a grin (and a chance to continue into infinity, yeah?)! ;) Thanx so much for sharing your pen and best of luck in the contest!! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Yvette
Comment from nomi338
Either Jeff needs a machine to help him think or he is pulling the doctor's leg, an unmanly thing to do. I believe the message is, time does its thing despite what we think or do in response.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Either Jeff needs a machine to help him think or he is pulling the doctor's leg, an unmanly thing to do. I believe the message is, time does its thing despite what we think or do in response.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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I tell people to read the first line again after the last line.
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I got it. I just wanted to mention the unmanliness of pulling a man's leg.
Comment from jim vecchio
A great entry for flash fiction. that ending was perfect. It's about time you wrote something like this. The story ran so smoothly, it took no time at all to finish. Take some time out and write more like this.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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A great entry for flash fiction. that ending was perfect. It's about time you wrote something like this. The story ran so smoothly, it took no time at all to finish. Take some time out and write more like this.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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I will if ZI have time.
Comment from lyenochka
A fun theory and maybe a minute could be enough time to change a life so it would be good but not recommended to use both time machines. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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A fun theory and maybe a minute could be enough time to change a life so it would be good but not recommended to use both time machines. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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I guess we use one of them all the time, Helen. Thanks for taking a look.
Comment from Karen Cherry
Just a very smart doctor getting his patients to get exercise! this was a hoot. Did you like my western "Hardly Quicksilver"? That only took two years to crank that sucker out. My muse was very little help. Good writing you did here. Karen
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Just a very smart doctor getting his patients to get exercise! this was a hoot. Did you like my western "Hardly Quicksilver"? That only took two years to crank that sucker out. My muse was very little help. Good writing you did here. Karen
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Thanks, Karen. I will check out the western.
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Thank you :-)
Comment from lancellot
Ah, so he went back in time he was supposed to have went back in time one minute, but now he is stuck in a never-ending cycle, a time paradox or loop.
Very interesting.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Ah, so he went back in time he was supposed to have went back in time one minute, but now he is stuck in a never-ending cycle, a time paradox or loop.
Very interesting.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Lance
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This reminds me of a documentary we watched. Today's research of time travel is hardly what back to the future movies expressed. This is well written with good imagery and dialogue.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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This reminds me of a documentary we watched. Today's research of time travel is hardly what back to the future movies expressed. This is well written with good imagery and dialogue.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Alex
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You're welcome, Bill.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Reliving our time would be great if we get to alter our pathway, but then again, by doing that we might encounter an early death! I enjoyed your inventive post Bill, love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Reliving our time would be great if we get to alter our pathway, but then again, by doing that we might encounter an early death! I enjoyed your inventive post Bill, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2025
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Thank you, Dolly
