Veil of Secrets
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15 total reviews
Comment from royowen
You cleverly created a sort of underworld where evil still existed until judgement comes into the afterlife when all will stand befote the judgment seat of of God, and then their hatred and evil will vibe swept away by the surging light. Well dine, blessings Roy
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You cleverly created a sort of underworld where evil still existed until judgement comes into the afterlife when all will stand befote the judgment seat of of God, and then their hatred and evil will vibe swept away by the surging light. Well dine, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A very intriguing chapter, Carol with Cornelius having much hate and greed to fire up his anger. Rebecca will need to be careful as will Eleanor. Another good read,
Cheers
Valda
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A very intriguing chapter, Carol with Cornelius having much hate and greed to fire up his anger. Rebecca will need to be careful as will Eleanor. Another good read,
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Carol,
This story is coming along nicely. Miriam has got her hands full this new ghost character. I only hope her husband or Eleanor can get to her soon and help save her.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
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Carol,
This story is coming along nicely. Miriam has got her hands full this new ghost character. I only hope her husband or Eleanor can get to her soon and help save her.
Well done my friend
Cecilia
Comment Written 09-Jan-2025
Comment from LJbutterfly
I was fascinated with Milo and Willow's reaction to Eleanor. They seem to understand that she feels the loss they feel. I also like Miriam's strength and resolve even though she's being held captive by Cornelius. I like her spirit and determination. This was a good character building chapter. I look forward to whatever you have in store for us next.
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I was fascinated with Milo and Willow's reaction to Eleanor. They seem to understand that she feels the loss they feel. I also like Miriam's strength and resolve even though she's being held captive by Cornelius. I like her spirit and determination. This was a good character building chapter. I look forward to whatever you have in store for us next.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, when there is a problem that can't be solved, just bring in a dead grandfather or a former first love to kick up the action and Get-R-Done.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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Yes, when there is a problem that can't be solved, just bring in a dead grandfather or a former first love to kick up the action and Get-R-Done.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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Are you making fun of me, my friend? This part of the Where there's a will, there's a way" logic I was taught. Never say can't...just get it done! Guess it carries over into my stories. Ahh...the joys of having a ghost or two around.
Smiles, Carol
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NEVER! Why or how could I ever make fun of you? But I'm a big old kid who loves to pick. :-)
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Yes, I know and I love to give it right back!And that's why we get along so well...Smiles and hugs, Carol
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Yes, my dear, life wouldn't be worth living without a little picky bantering. It's kept me in trouble most of my life. But do you think I ever gave a damn? :-)
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You are awesome! And I am smiling!!!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can't wait until we find Antonio. This is getting really good. Eleanor will be to be at her very best to win this one. This is another very good write. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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I can't wait until we find Antonio. This is getting really good. Eleanor will be to be at her very best to win this one. This is another very good write. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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Your wish is my command...Chapter 5 has Antonio in the vineyard... Hope he meets your expectations. Yes, there are many different forces to battle so things will get rough.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Jacob1395
I could really feel Eleanor's longing to find Miriam and I know she won't rest until she does. I liked how you included a scene with Miriam at the end of the chapter which I thought was really powerful. Another excellent chapter, Carol, I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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I could really feel Eleanor's longing to find Miriam and I know she won't rest until she does. I liked how you included a scene with Miriam at the end of the chapter which I thought was really powerful. Another excellent chapter, Carol, I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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I hope that every chapter gets under the reader's skin and makes them feel the emotions within the characters. They come alive to me...maybe that's silly but after all these books they seem like friends.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
You used great descriptions in this chapter. Milo and Willow react interestingly to Miriam's presence. I like how the mirror reflects the presences, and also seems to reflect the mood of the characters. Will Antonio be joining the ghostly crew? I'll wait for the next segment to find out. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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You used great descriptions in this chapter. Milo and Willow react interestingly to Miriam's presence. I like how the mirror reflects the presences, and also seems to reflect the mood of the characters. Will Antonio be joining the ghostly crew? I'll wait for the next segment to find out. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2025
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Oh, Carol, you are so kind to me. Hope as you read this story, you were getting the rest you need to recover. My thoughts and prayers are with you. As for Antonio....read on, my friend.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Wow, what a powerful chapter, Carol! That Cornelius is a nasty peice of work! So, Miriam is trapped inside the mirror? Eleanor could feel something there but not enough to tell her friend was inside it. Which is natural, who would even think that could happen? If only Milo and Willow could talk. I can't wait for the next part. Well done, my dear friend. :)) Love and hugs, Sandra xx
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Wow, what a powerful chapter, Carol! That Cornelius is a nasty peice of work! So, Miriam is trapped inside the mirror? Eleanor could feel something there but not enough to tell her friend was inside it. Which is natural, who would even think that could happen? If only Milo and Willow could talk. I can't wait for the next part. Well done, my dear friend. :)) Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Tim Margetts
Love it, loooove it!
So she is the girl(woman) in the mirror.
This is a great piece of writing, Carol. It moves the story on in new and delicious ways.
Looking forward to the next
Tim x
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Love it, loooove it!
So she is the girl(woman) in the mirror.
This is a great piece of writing, Carol. It moves the story on in new and delicious ways.
Looking forward to the next
Tim x
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
