The Kirby Case - Part 1
A detective attempts to find a serial killer29 total reviews
Comment from Michele Harber
What an excellent start to what I'm happy to see is a series. It's hard enough to write a successful mystery story, but to do so in rhyme and meter is much, much more difficult. Not surprisingly, you've figured out the trick.
You beautifully laid out character and plot without missing a beat--literally. I'm anxious to read the other chapter you've written, which I'll do now.
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What an excellent start to what I'm happy to see is a series. It's hard enough to write a successful mystery story, but to do so in rhyme and meter is much, much more difficult. Not surprisingly, you've figured out the trick.
You beautifully laid out character and plot without missing a beat--literally. I'm anxious to read the other chapter you've written, which I'll do now.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Tim Margetts
Well now, Pam.
A crime and detective tale in a poetic form. This is a new one on me, but I must say you have me hooked with Part 1.
Is the man in the picture the lead detective?
Also, is this a work of fiction or based on a real case?
Tim x
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Well now, Pam.
A crime and detective tale in a poetic form. This is a new one on me, but I must say you have me hooked with Part 1.
Is the man in the picture the lead detective?
Also, is this a work of fiction or based on a real case?
Tim x
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Begin Again
Genius! You, the author, of course.... I can't believe that you have taken a mystery-crime story and made it into a poem that rhymes and I can actually understand. A lot of poems go over my head...but this is fabulous. Off to read the next one...
Smiles, Carol
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Genius! You, the author, of course.... I can't believe that you have taken a mystery-crime story and made it into a poem that rhymes and I can actually understand. A lot of poems go over my head...but this is fabulous. Off to read the next one...
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Pam,
This is a great poem. It's sad at the same time. It is hard for detectives to solve a case without DNA. The killer is smart that way and a disgusting human being at the same time.
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Pam,
This is a great poem. It's sad at the same time. It is hard for detectives to solve a case without DNA. The killer is smart that way and a disgusting human being at the same time.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
They were raped but no semen stains? I don't know that I've ever heard of a rapist taking such care.
So he plants a (painted) kiss on their chest; the kiss of death?
Pam, I'm intrigued, even though the subject matter is gruesome. I've not seen a series of poem that tell a story before, and I'm looking forward to reading the next seven.
I assume this is true? I could just Google the Kirby case, but could you post a couple of suggested websites where we could go to get more information. I assume you've used a few to research your poems.
Thanks,
Pam
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They were raped but no semen stains? I don't know that I've ever heard of a rapist taking such care.
So he plants a (painted) kiss on their chest; the kiss of death?
Pam, I'm intrigued, even though the subject matter is gruesome. I've not seen a series of poem that tell a story before, and I'm looking forward to reading the next seven.
I assume this is true? I could just Google the Kirby case, but could you post a couple of suggested websites where we could go to get more information. I assume you've used a few to research your poems.
Thanks,
Pam
Comment Written 08-Jan-2025
Comment from DonandVicki
I just read part two first, I'm glad that I got part one so I am all caught up with your poetic crime thriller. You could very well be onto something new, a new genre. don
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I just read part two first, I'm glad that I got part one so I am all caught up with your poetic crime thriller. You could very well be onto something new, a new genre. don
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Wow! Holy smokes eh?! I'm canadian, but I do remember hearing something about it. Some are just dark, dark, dark and evil.I swear
Such a sister yet beautifully written piece. I see you have a part two I shall go to read that as well. Immediately engaging your poem is. The matter of fact, way that you wrote it, it is brilliant.
Thank you for this very stirring, and yet impactful poem. Thank you for your submission. I wish you only the best.Have a great evening!
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Wow! Holy smokes eh?! I'm canadian, but I do remember hearing something about it. Some are just dark, dark, dark and evil.I swear
Such a sister yet beautifully written piece. I see you have a part two I shall go to read that as well. Immediately engaging your poem is. The matter of fact, way that you wrote it, it is brilliant.
Thank you for this very stirring, and yet impactful poem. Thank you for your submission. I wish you only the best.Have a great evening!
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
Comment from Bill Schott
This story poem, The Kirby Case Part 1, introduces this murder case in such a way as to pull the readers in for the ride to find the killer of women in Kirby Field.
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This story poem, The Kirby Case Part 1, introduces this murder case in such a way as to pull the readers in for the ride to find the killer of women in Kirby Field.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The way you wrote this was really well done, and pulls the reader straight in. Is it a true story? It doesn't matter if it is fiction the writing crime story in poetry is very clever. I'm off to read part two now! Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
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The way you wrote this was really well done, and pulls the reader straight in. Is it a true story? It doesn't matter if it is fiction the writing crime story in poetry is very clever. I'm off to read part two now! Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
Comment from patcelaw
This is a well written story in poetic form and I enjoyed listening to it. I'm not a big fan of murder stories however. May you have a wonderful day and I wish you the very best with your writing. God bless. Patricia.
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This is a well written story in poetic form and I enjoyed listening to it. I'm not a big fan of murder stories however. May you have a wonderful day and I wish you the very best with your writing. God bless. Patricia.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
