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Comment from Karen Cherry
You are certainly unique here in the way you present poetry. I will have to go back and read some more of you.
Here is my offering to you, to see if I can write in your style.
Centuries old she bides her time
Winning will be quite sublime
Others tempted her to fight
But she knew it wasn't right
She watches from her fixed abode
Following her lonely road
A battle will come soon she knows
She'll be the one to give the blows
She has gathered her army of stone
It is time for all to atone
Her win is clear for all to see
After all it came from me.
I hope you liked what you inspired in me. Karen
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2025
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You are certainly unique here in the way you present poetry. I will have to go back and read some more of you.
Here is my offering to you, to see if I can write in your style.
Centuries old she bides her time
Winning will be quite sublime
Others tempted her to fight
But she knew it wasn't right
She watches from her fixed abode
Following her lonely road
A battle will come soon she knows
She'll be the one to give the blows
She has gathered her army of stone
It is time for all to atone
Her win is clear for all to see
After all it came from me.
I hope you liked what you inspired in me. Karen
Comment Written 04-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2025
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Drop the she in the first line, and you'll be seven syllables.Like all the rest of the lines. Second stanza of first line take out her.
That's beautiful. That certainly feels like something I might have written what you've done it in your own style and makes it extra special. I'm glad these words came from you and that you were inspired.That's a fine compliment! I thank you for that. I gave you a few little twerks and ques down below. That will line your poem up imperfect.Cadence and correct syllable count per line. Once that's done, you have a perfect poem. I can donate contest you choose.Pretty much, and it would have well. Awesome! Thank you too for your great review. In you, encouraging words much appreciated by me. I hope you don't mind me. Giving a couple little changes on your poem. Changes will take nothing away from your meaning or the beauty of it. Thank you again have an awesome night!
"A battle comes soon she knows" small change " she'll be one to give the blows" the first line last dances take up the word has. Second line last stanza change, it is to its third line last stanza, change win is to wins. Small little tweaks keeps you at seven syllables per life. perfect cadence, that way and takes nothing away from, I must say a beautiful poem.
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edited poem:
Centuries old she bides her time
Winning will be quite sublime
Others tempted her to fight
But she knew it wasn't right
She watches from her fixed abode
Following her lonely road
A battle will come soon she knows
She'll be the one to give the blows
She has gathered her army of stone
It is time for all to atone
Her win is clear for all to see
After all it came from me.
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That's so beautiful run with it girl!
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Thanks so much. You are sweet as peach pie. Karen
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Thank you karen as are you!
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Why thank you, I love peachesPeach cobbler is my favorite. Karen
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Yum
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Comment from thoughtgame2
first; how have you been? i re'd all three of the poems that were offered to me, ofcourse they were stunning to say the least. i admire your steadfastness in this writing arena. i am not that strong as yet. but im working on it...(smile).
you are where you are in this world becuase you stay true to your passion, no matter what. i have learned that from reading your works. you are in a race to be the best with the best..you. there will be no takers of your prize. thank you for sharing this side of your self with me. great job.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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first; how have you been? i re'd all three of the poems that were offered to me, ofcourse they were stunning to say the least. i admire your steadfastness in this writing arena. i am not that strong as yet. but im working on it...(smile).
you are where you are in this world becuase you stay true to your passion, no matter what. i have learned that from reading your works. you are in a race to be the best with the best..you. there will be no takers of your prize. thank you for sharing this side of your self with me. great job.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Oh, my lord, that's just the best review! Wow thank you very much! I'm doing good. My book is released globally. I've almost finished book 2 of the series. I call it the spirit series. Book one ghost book, two spectre book three apparition. How nice to chat with you again! You can do anything you set your mind to you. Just gotta take one step out of that fear circle.Dip your toes in the water.At least you can say you did. And you are much better writer than you give yourself credit for. Onward and upward I always say! Thank you for this wonderful review for your time. And the great rating you have provided. But just seeing you here is great enough. Thank you again. I hope your Christmas was great. I hope new year brings you everything you wish and hope for!
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i really need help in placing my work...any would be appreciated.
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Sure i'll check it out
Comment from Jim Wile
Powerful, Lea. If I'm interpreting this correctly, it seems like this embodies the transformation of a tortured soul who imagines the strength of stone and fantasizes about having that sort of strength and then transforming herself into such a species where she now has the power to crush her enemies. This powerful fantasy has set her mind free and given her the power to face her enemies and triumph over them.
Perhaps this is a little like your own personal story?
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Powerful, Lea. If I'm interpreting this correctly, it seems like this embodies the transformation of a tortured soul who imagines the strength of stone and fantasizes about having that sort of strength and then transforming herself into such a species where she now has the power to crush her enemies. This powerful fantasy has set her mind free and given her the power to face her enemies and triumph over them.
Perhaps this is a little like your own personal story?
Comment Written 04-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Thank you Jim! In some ways there are some parallels. An interesting observation. New mutants come have different mixes, and blends each having their own trade. Your own survival skill in our own places to do so. The battle is more internal.If they are mutant, or if they are human, each side determines their destiny. Super, glad You like these? Happy to have you as always. And thank you so much again. You honor me with your presence!
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Lea. You are doing a great job with the descriptions of your stone people.. your explanations of their strengths and action match up with their stone facades. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Hello Lea. You are doing a great job with the descriptions of your stone people.. your explanations of their strengths and action match up with their stone facades. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 04-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Thank you Melissa! That's a great compliment! Glad you like this! These folks, these mutant people seem to be carrying on blowing out the end of my proverbial pen. We'll have smartphone in games too. New characters and such should make it even more of an interesting story, I think. I truly am honored and privileged to have you here.Always encouraging for which I appreciate very much! Hope you have the best evening!
Comment from Nicki.B
Another beautiful poem for your great new collection! This is a perfect entry for the 'poem about a woman' best of luck with the contest.
I love how you entertwine stoney puns throughout keeping with family of stone theme. Well done great work
Nicki x
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Another beautiful poem for your great new collection! This is a perfect entry for the 'poem about a woman' best of luck with the contest.
I love how you entertwine stoney puns throughout keeping with family of stone theme. Well done great work
Nicki x
Comment Written 04-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Thank you or find compliment Nicki! So happy you like it. It's turning into it a story within poetry, and it may end up building a book. We shall see how it goes. But there will be new characters too.Just spice it up a little bit. Thank you again. I appreciate your encouragement. Your time you're fine rating two I hope you have the best night!
Comment from Tim Margetts
This is a thought-provoking poem, Lea
It is good to see your longer works as you can fill them with so much more power and descriptions than the short ones.
The short ones are good, but I personally find the longer generally better.
However, that said, don't stop the short ones as a great truth can be encompassed in a few words.
Tim x
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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This is a thought-provoking poem, Lea
It is good to see your longer works as you can fill them with so much more power and descriptions than the short ones.
The short ones are good, but I personally find the longer generally better.
However, that said, don't stop the short ones as a great truth can be encompassed in a few words.
Tim x
Comment Written 04-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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I prefer the longer ones too, so you are not alone in that. Seems to be grime and i'm going to create the book I think we'll go on from there. New characters will be introduced. My imagination's been going up super hugely funky. So we're gonna have some fun, see what we can bring in. Thank you again, tim a super appreciate you.As always, you are encouraging and curious.I like that. I hope you have the best evening!
Comment from Jacob1395
This is an excellent descriptive piece, Lea, and I think you describe well the certain power women can have in this piece well. A really well written piece, I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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This is an excellent descriptive piece, Lea, and I think you describe well the certain power women can have in this piece well. A really well written piece, I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Thank you Jacob! You are always very encouraging and uplifting. That's a great thing, especially for the writer, the reader being the most important. Thank you again, my friend. I appreciate seeing you here as always. I hope that your holiday was great and that everything is well with you and yours. Have an awesome night!
Comment from DonandVicki
Your poem brings out the strength of all women, I have always believed that women are smarter than men. Your superwoman poem is a tribute to all women.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Your poem brings out the strength of all women, I have always believed that women are smarter than men. Your superwoman poem is a tribute to all women.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025
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Here here!!! Totally glad you liked the poem. As always, I'm happy to see you here. Offering an encouragement and your great comments! Gotta do one about the female of the other species as well. New characters were called.Come aboard, adding an interesting mix!: Thank you so much.I hope your evening is great!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Lea, I could look at that image forever! She's amazing! She certainly does steel the day for me! And I wouldn't want to mess with her either. My impression is that she is omnipotent as a mutant woman and her great strength and purpose is liberating to the author. Well done again, Lea, on another impressive contest entry about your remarkable characters! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2025
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Lea, I could look at that image forever! She's amazing! She certainly does steel the day for me! And I wouldn't want to mess with her either. My impression is that she is omnipotent as a mutant woman and her great strength and purpose is liberating to the author. Well done again, Lea, on another impressive contest entry about your remarkable characters! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 03-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2025
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Hello again Debbie! The series seems to be going pretty well. I'm really glad that you and others are liking it. I shall introduce new characters.See where the story brings us. Thank you, as always for your great review.
Nice. I wanted to put out a strong figure for women as well as men. Each with different talents. Thank you so much, Debbie again. I appreciate your kindness and your time and your great rating too.Have an awesome day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your uplifting poem about a woman of stone here Lea. I enjoyed your end rhymes and I felt the feminine power in this post, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2025
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I enjoyed your uplifting poem about a woman of stone here Lea. I enjoyed your end rhymes and I felt the feminine power in this post, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 03-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2025
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Awesome That's what I hope to convey.Thank you for that! Thanks for reading and rating and your time! I appreciate you and all that you do. Thank you so much hanging in there with me. Oh I appreciate that as well! Have a great day!
