Whispers
a 5-7-5 poetic form19 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
Isn't it something, how our muse whispers most of the time? I never hear him whisper! Only when he shouts do I reach for my pen. Most of the time, he's AWOL.
I like the combo... "windless nights/wild shadows/whispering muse"... the three adjectives all begin with "w".
Nice entry for the 5-7-5 contest. "Good Luck!"
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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Hi Melissa,
Isn't it something, how our muse whispers most of the time? I never hear him whisper! Only when he shouts do I reach for my pen. Most of the time, he's AWOL.
I like the combo... "windless nights/wild shadows/whispering muse"... the three adjectives all begin with "w".
Nice entry for the 5-7-5 contest. "Good Luck!"
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 02-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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Hello KB. Thanks for your insight on this verse. I like to use 'W' words. When I write in amphibrach meter, I love beginning with the word "Whenever". Such possibilities with the word ... whenever... it can go anywhere. LOL. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Whispers, has the proper formatting and finds the notions and ideas forming in the moving shadows cast by light inspired by the creativity that circles around you. Nice.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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This 5-7-5, Whispers, has the proper formatting and finds the notions and ideas forming in the moving shadows cast by light inspired by the creativity that circles around you. Nice.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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Hi Bill. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I love your 'candle whisperings' Melissa. A lovely scene you describe here with your lovely descriptive alliteration. Beautifully written and presented. Happy writing in 2025.
Valda
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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I love your 'candle whisperings' Melissa. A lovely scene you describe here with your lovely descriptive alliteration. Beautifully written and presented. Happy writing in 2025.
Valda
Comment Written 31-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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Hello Valda. Thanks so very much for your wonderful review!! So appreciate you, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Ah, Melissa this 5-7-5 poem for the contest appealed to my imagination. Something was definitely stirring on this still windless night where the candle should have merely cast a steady shadow. Your muse was brewing.
Loved it. All the best of luck. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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Ah, Melissa this 5-7-5 poem for the contest appealed to my imagination. Something was definitely stirring on this still windless night where the candle should have merely cast a steady shadow. Your muse was brewing.
Loved it. All the best of luck. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 30-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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Hello Ulla. Dean Koontz told me once to try writing at night by the light of a single candle. I've tried it a few times and must admit the inspiration and prompts were wonderful. Thank you so much.
Melissa
Comment from Rachelle Allen
She did you a solid with this one, for sure, that muse of yours! A creative type like yourself, though, probably needs only the teeniest of nudges to find something unique and fabulous flowing from the tip of your pen. I love this glowing, exotic-looking picture! xoxo
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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She did you a solid with this one, for sure, that muse of yours! A creative type like yourself, though, probably needs only the teeniest of nudges to find something unique and fabulous flowing from the tip of your pen. I love this glowing, exotic-looking picture! xoxo
Comment Written 30-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Haha, thanks Rachelle. I'll be sure and tell Miss Muse that she's appreciated. Hugs!
Melissa
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Yes, please do that!! xoxox
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-A very good opening line describes the setting,
following by the impact on your candle.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-A very good opening line describes the setting,
following by the impact on your candle.
-A very good satori line.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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thank you so much, Pam. I appreciate your lovely comments. Hugs!
Melissa
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You are very welcome, Melissa, and hugs back to you!
Comment from June Sargent
You've captured a serene moment when a writer suddenly senses her muse awakening and stirring - and whispering in her ears. That spark of creativity comes out of the shadows and a poem is born.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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You've captured a serene moment when a writer suddenly senses her muse awakening and stirring - and whispering in her ears. That spark of creativity comes out of the shadows and a poem is born.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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thank you June. I can see that you understand this poem thoroughly. The flickers are from the candlelight and the Muse :)
Melissa
Comment from royowen
I've used the metaphorical candle in a number of the poems I've written, so yes, in the darkness even a candle is like a lighthouse, this is a lovely poem, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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I've used the metaphorical candle in a number of the poems I've written, so yes, in the darkness even a candle is like a lighthouse, this is a lovely poem, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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thanks so much Roy!!
Melissa
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Bless you
Comment from lyenochka
I like how much you accomplish through implying the metaphor of the candle and the wind that doesn't really blow but the wind of inspiration still moves the the candle and whispers to the narrator what to write. Best wishes in the contest!!
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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I like how much you accomplish through implying the metaphor of the candle and the wind that doesn't really blow but the wind of inspiration still moves the the candle and whispers to the narrator what to write. Best wishes in the contest!!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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hi Helen. You so get it. Thank you for a lovely review!!
Melissa
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The first thing thought with your title was a Jackie Wilson's song. Great tune. Do you recall it or are you too young? Love the picture and your knowledge of agronomy.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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The first thing thought with your title was a Jackie Wilson's song. Great tune. Do you recall it or are you too young? Love the picture and your knowledge of agronomy.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Thanks so much, Tom. So appreciate you!
Melissa
