Comment from Lindsey Russell

Excellent

This is a very unique story. I've not read anything like it before. I really liked it. Good luck with it. Are other chapters posted? Good luck with this and happy writing!

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2025

---

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025

Thanks for your feedback. I was afraid people would think it was too long to read.

Comment from Barry Penfold

Excellent

This was a pretty enjoyable read. Plenty of action and I can anticipate there is much more to come. It appears that Shadia is some expert with the sword and general fighting. Thanks for sharing and I hope to see some further material soon. Take care.
Regards,
Barry Penfold.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2025

---

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025

Thank you. I was afraid this would be too long of a read on some people's opinion.

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I was hooked right from the first paragraph. I enjoyed how you kept the characters' personalities. Your story has so much energy and action - I felt like I was watching an intense movie scene! I really liked how you kept the pacing fast and packed with suspense, especially during Shadia and Jesuree's fight.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2025

---

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2025

Thank you. I actually did write a script with this and turned it into a novel. Thanks for reading.