Sarah Helps Brown
Brown seeks help.5 total reviews
Comment from karenina
A dialogue only story? I was just telling Tom Hormones I find these especially difficult to write!
This is very on point and the conversation is smooth flowing...
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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A dialogue only story? I was just telling Tom Hormones I find these especially difficult to write!
This is very on point and the conversation is smooth flowing...
Karenina
Comment Written 30-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Thank you! I'm glad you think so!
Comment from Peter Jarvis
This is a tale of struggle and a turnaround. It depicts Brown's journey from the lowest point of his life to hope and a new beginning with Sara's help.
Thank you for sharing this delightful exchange.
Blessings.
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2024
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This is a tale of struggle and a turnaround. It depicts Brown's journey from the lowest point of his life to hope and a new beginning with Sara's help.
Thank you for sharing this delightful exchange.
Blessings.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from jim vecchio
This short tale is very similar to others you've written, but this was much better. No problems with grammar or dialogue. One small typo:"I counseling sessions," Brown replied. (in?)
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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This short tale is very similar to others you've written, but this was much better. No problems with grammar or dialogue. One small typo:"I counseling sessions," Brown replied. (in?)
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Typos fixed. Thank you for your help and review!
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You're welcome.
Comment from royowen
Depression seems to be very prevalent these days, so self help can be an excellent assuming it works, I'm not sure how, I remember I was depressed as a teenage, but I decided to stop being depressed...and I was, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Depression seems to be very prevalent these days, so self help can be an excellent assuming it works, I'm not sure how, I remember I was depressed as a teenage, but I decided to stop being depressed...and I was, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Thank you!
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Welcome
Comment from nomi338
You had a slight boo boo on line 3 and 5. They did not affect my opinion of the piece so I did not deduct any points. Please do not forget to edit more carefully.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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You had a slight boo boo on line 3 and 5. They did not affect my opinion of the piece so I did not deduct any points. Please do not forget to edit more carefully.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Typos fixed. Thank you for your help and review!
