Empty Rooms
rooms frozen in time7 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Death is part of life there is no way to avoid it.
That said, children should bury their parents and not the other way around.
Too many young lives , kids, teens are dying, run down by cars , killed at school, or gunned down on the streets during gang disputes etc.
Too many are dying of cancer, blood diseases etc
Losing a child is a loss many parents don't get over.
Sadly suicide is on the rise in teens.
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Death is part of life there is no way to avoid it.
That said, children should bury their parents and not the other way around.
Too many young lives , kids, teens are dying, run down by cars , killed at school, or gunned down on the streets during gang disputes etc.
Too many are dying of cancer, blood diseases etc
Losing a child is a loss many parents don't get over.
Sadly suicide is on the rise in teens.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
Comment from Elizabeth Delaney
This poem beautifully mourns lives cut short, vividly portraying abandoned rooms filled with memories and unfulfilled dreams. Its imagery powerfully conveys the weight of loss and the ache of what remains.
Loved every part of this! thank you for sharing your gift
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This poem beautifully mourns lives cut short, vividly portraying abandoned rooms filled with memories and unfulfilled dreams. Its imagery powerfully conveys the weight of loss and the ache of what remains.
Loved every part of this! thank you for sharing your gift
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
Comment from Beejay
Empty Rooms,I like your title. I feel like I should be reading the words in a low voice or whisper...that I'm being intrusive, like an uninvited guest.very well presented and crafted.Good luck you.
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Empty Rooms,I like your title. I feel like I should be reading the words in a low voice or whisper...that I'm being intrusive, like an uninvited guest.very well presented and crafted.Good luck you.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I accidentally deleted this from my PM box but remembered seeing two notifications of posts about your writing so searched it out. I'm glad I did. This is an excellent writing prompt entry and good luck with the contest.
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I accidentally deleted this from my PM box but remembered seeing two notifications of posts about your writing so searched it out. I'm glad I did. This is an excellent writing prompt entry and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
Comment from Sandollar
This poem has managed to capture the spirit of each room and the reason I stopped to read it. It has wonderful imagery. I also liked that the first line of every verse described what would come after it. My favorite one is:
The bed is neatly made,
blankets pulled tight,
as if the morning routine
might still call them back--
but the air is frozen, a breath held forever
in a moment that will not come.
There was nothing glaring at me in terms of mistakes.
I enjoyed this poem even though it made me sad.
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This poem has managed to capture the spirit of each room and the reason I stopped to read it. It has wonderful imagery. I also liked that the first line of every verse described what would come after it. My favorite one is:
The bed is neatly made,
blankets pulled tight,
as if the morning routine
might still call them back--
but the air is frozen, a breath held forever
in a moment that will not come.
There was nothing glaring at me in terms of mistakes.
I enjoyed this poem even though it made me sad.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
Comment from DonandVicki
A poem that brings out such sad emotions and feelings of a deep loss. So very well written, and brings out visuals of the horror of losing a love one. Very emotional.
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A poem that brings out such sad emotions and feelings of a deep loss. So very well written, and brings out visuals of the horror of losing a love one. Very emotional.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
Comment from Alicia johnston
I love this ! Great writing! I love that it leads you down a ride but the ending answer never comes or is revealed your open to only assume which drives me insane but cause endless thoughts and possibilities .. I love your writing I wish it would have ryythmed better but still amazing
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I love this ! Great writing! I love that it leads you down a ride but the ending answer never comes or is revealed your open to only assume which drives me insane but cause endless thoughts and possibilities .. I love your writing I wish it would have ryythmed better but still amazing
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024