Eye of the Beholder
Reflections prose3 total reviews
Comment from Lea Tonin1
A really nice lovely poem for sure. "Can you direct me to my release" a fabulous line and my favorite. A great entry to the contest and the good contender, I think you might even get a prize out of this one! I wish you best of luck.Hope you have an awesome holiday.Your evening's great tooth!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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A really nice lovely poem for sure. "Can you direct me to my release" a fabulous line and my favorite. A great entry to the contest and the good contender, I think you might even get a prize out of this one! I wish you best of luck.Hope you have an awesome holiday.Your evening's great tooth!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thank you! Second place!~
Comment from papa55mike
I've read several of these entries today, and they are all good. Please lighten the font a little, it would make it easier to read. This is a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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I've read several of these entries today, and they are all good. Please lighten the font a little, it would make it easier to read. This is a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Font Corrected.
Thank you - Second place!
Comment from lancellot
This is a good entry. I would make two recommendations.
1) change the color of the font. I suggest a bright white or bright silver.
2) Look over the rhyme of the first four lines. Sound them out and see if they fit as they appear.
Excuse me sir, but I have a need
To deliver myself relief, to pee!
Can you direct me to my release?
To the room, if you please?
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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This is a good entry. I would make two recommendations.
1) change the color of the font. I suggest a bright white or bright silver.
2) Look over the rhyme of the first four lines. Sound them out and see if they fit as they appear.
Excuse me sir, but I have a need
To deliver myself relief, to pee!
Can you direct me to my release?
To the room, if you please?
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2024
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Thank you Lancellot - I appreciate the fact that you are always direct and honest. I prefer that over accolades that are unwarranted.