Willing Hearts
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Comment from estory
The future is starting to take shape in this chapter for Sami and Noah. First she gets some encouragement from Amber and some advice, to stay focused on the relationship and not let work interfere with it. Noah seems to take it to heart too. There's a couple of little technical things like repeating "moisture filled their eyes" consecutively that I think seem a little awkward, but that's an easy fix in editing. The dialogue is pretty realistic, as always, although the characters seem a little quick to tears, especially for people who don't really have that close of a relationship, but that can be fixed too. The real step is when Sami starts considering adopting Myra, and as the social worker suggests her application would fare better as a couple, Noah quickly steps in and gives his support. So we can see them in the future as foster parents for this battered and damaged girl. Like I said, we see the future taking shape in front of them here. estory
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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The future is starting to take shape in this chapter for Sami and Noah. First she gets some encouragement from Amber and some advice, to stay focused on the relationship and not let work interfere with it. Noah seems to take it to heart too. There's a couple of little technical things like repeating "moisture filled their eyes" consecutively that I think seem a little awkward, but that's an easy fix in editing. The dialogue is pretty realistic, as always, although the characters seem a little quick to tears, especially for people who don't really have that close of a relationship, but that can be fixed too. The real step is when Sami starts considering adopting Myra, and as the social worker suggests her application would fare better as a couple, Noah quickly steps in and gives his support. So we can see them in the future as foster parents for this battered and damaged girl. Like I said, we see the future taking shape in front of them here. estory
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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I'll take a look at that. I added a moisture filled eyes as I posted. Probably need to remove it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Aw Barbara, this was a lovely chapter, regardless of all the heartbreak within. Now, Noah is taking Sami out for a treat. I'm really looking forward to that. Great writing and story. Hugs, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Aw Barbara, this was a lovely chapter, regardless of all the heartbreak within. Now, Noah is taking Sami out for a treat. I'm really looking forward to that. Great writing and story. Hugs, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Barbra,
This is a great chapter to your book. Poor Myra she has a long way to go. I vaguely remember the chapter where she was rescued.
I don't know why when you write I don't get notified.
Well done my friend.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Barbra,
This is a great chapter to your book. Poor Myra she has a long way to go. I vaguely remember the chapter where she was rescued.
I don't know why when you write I don't get notified.
Well done my friend.
Cecilia
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I have no idea either. If you've fanned me then maybe need to ask Tom.
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You're welcome. I will reach out to Tom and find out why.
Comment from Begin Again
I wonder if Sami would have had the strenth to be with Myra if it hadn't been for Noah. He seems to be the cement in her foundation now. Very good chapter. The truth in the girls recovery sends chills through me.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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I wonder if Sami would have had the strenth to be with Myra if it hadn't been for Noah. He seems to be the cement in her foundation now. Very good chapter. The truth in the girls recovery sends chills through me.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
An interesting chapter. I am used to how Sami (female leads) are portrayed emotionally now. The writing is solid and nothing amiss stood out.
notes:
"I can't answer that. There's evidence she engaged in rough sex. Most girls at gentlemen's club engaged in sex."
-Wait. How is the doctor telling her any of this? He'd lose his job.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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An interesting chapter. I am used to how Sami (female leads) are portrayed emotionally now. The writing is solid and nothing amiss stood out.
notes:
"I can't answer that. There's evidence she engaged in rough sex. Most girls at gentlemen's club engaged in sex."
-Wait. How is the doctor telling her any of this? He'd lose his job.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.