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You Are Never Too Old

A very short story

8 total reviews 
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
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What a wonderful story. It has an upbeat tone to it. It flows nicely from beginning to end. I bet Wesley got the surprise of his life.

Well done and good luck in the contest.

Cecilia

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
    Thank you, Cecilia, for your enthusiastic response to my shortie.i truly
reply by Cecilia A Heiskary on 15-Dec-2024
    You're welcome
Comment from Pam (respa)
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Good artwork and story to go with it. A good opening that introduces Wesley and his 80th birthday being celebrated with friends at the Senior Center who planned the event. They made sure he noticed the cake, and then, Surprise! I imagine it was a big surprise for Wesley. He must have known Melinda, too. Now he knows her even better. A very good entry; good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
    I think Wesley was surprised and delighted. Many thanks, Pam, for your kind praise.
reply by Pam (respa) on 15-Dec-2024
    He probably was. You are very welcome for the review.
Comment from Sallyo
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Now, that is a surprise and a half. I hope his heart was in good shape, as well as his blood pressure and sense of humour. This one is fun, and a properly shaped story.

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
    I , too, hope his heart was in good shape. Glad you enjoyed my story, Sallyo.
Comment from SimianSavant
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That's freaking hilarious. Hopefully when I am 80 someone does that for my birthday.

Just two things on formatting. 1) your image is not actually transparent. To avoid this, make sure to save the actual transparent image, without the background on an image editor. 2) if you want your text to start below the image rather than to the right of it, which can be distracting, at the bottom of your editor, click the advanced options and set your image size to small.

Thanks for the read and good luck in the contest,

🦍

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
    Thank you so much, Simian. I am delighted you were amused. And I appreciate the advice about my image.
Comment from lancellot
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Well, I guess it was a surprise for him. Maybe, if he saw a huge paper cake and only four out of five women. It's a nice story, and how I hope my senior years go. Don't tell the wife.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
    Thank you very much, lancellot.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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There's no doubt that you fulfilled the theme of "Surprise" here. He certainly wasn't expecting that. And the great thing about your short story is that it leaves the reader wanting more. Nicely done in such succinct format. Good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
    Thank you very much, Debbie, for this encouraging review of my story.
Comment from kahpot
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Excellent, now I am left wondering if poor old Wesley survived such a surprise, very well done, as one would definitely not be expecting that at their age, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
    I like your wry reaction to my story and truly appreciate your kind praise. Thank you.
Comment from Beejay
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I loved the words, " he donned on his boots"
A brilliantly crafted story..I wonder what surprise is in store for Chester Kennedy next year!!
Good luck in the Surprise competition....

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2024


reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
    Thank you, Beejay. I am thrilled you enjoyed the story.