Comment from
Tista S.
Love it! It is such a surprise! I love how you gave them bond and didn't let go of all the suspense you brought into the story. I hope you continue to write stories, and good luck on winning this contest! ~Tista
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
Thank you for your lovely review.
Take care
Comment from
lancellot
Okay, you have a surprise reunion and of finding a long lost child for your main character. You have a good theme, perfect for the FanStory voters, and you have a nice presentation. I would advise adding end punctuations for your first two paragraphs.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024