Lust for life
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Comment from tempeste
Ciao writer! You now have 8 votes!
Edward in Twilight was not happy but everything change when he met Bella.
He didn't want to turn her into a vampire, but she wanted to be like Edward, young and beautiful forever.
I enjoy your style, it flows well and captivates.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Ciao writer! You now have 8 votes!
Edward in Twilight was not happy but everything change when he met Bella.
He didn't want to turn her into a vampire, but she wanted to be like Edward, young and beautiful forever.
I enjoy your style, it flows well and captivates.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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I am sorry to be late, bathroom problems have kept me on the run so to speak. Thanks for the read, I won 1st place. Yippie! Merry Christmas to me. Karen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Lovely! Beautifully fluent and chilling. Nirvana is the target and the blood on her finger is enough to stir his vampire lust. This is a great entry for the contest under the brief of deadly sins. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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Lovely! Beautifully fluent and chilling. Nirvana is the target and the blood on her finger is enough to stir his vampire lust. This is a great entry for the contest under the brief of deadly sins. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the read. always appreciated.
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your poem tends to paint a picture of the craving of the dead to return back to life and enjoy the things the living do. It flowed quite well, and made a beautiful read. Well done, dear.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Your poem tends to paint a picture of the craving of the dead to return back to life and enjoy the things the living do. It flowed quite well, and made a beautiful read. Well done, dear.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much. I enjoyed writing it.
Comment from Avery Daniel
This was a really dark, yet rather deceptively deep poem. I would suggest a wee change. You were a bit too verbose with the line "am I here, am I not here." J would suggest condensing it to improve story flow. Other than that, this was a great rendition of the lonesome some of us feel.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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This was a really dark, yet rather deceptively deep poem. I would suggest a wee change. You were a bit too verbose with the line "am I here, am I not here." J would suggest condensing it to improve story flow. Other than that, this was a great rendition of the lonesome some of us feel.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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I was explaining he was not alive, but not dead. I appreciate your taking the time to review me. I like it as it is. But, I thank you for your opinion.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, yes, lust is a sin though by the look of this fella he may be lusting for quite a bit, your first line is wonderful it sets the tone for your work, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Excellent, yes, lust is a sin though by the look of this fella he may be lusting for quite a bit, your first line is wonderful it sets the tone for your work, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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He is gorgeous is he not? That picture said it all for me. I appreciate the review.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Wow, this is a great deadly sin poem. The words are raw and paint a scene for the reader like they are sitting on the sidelines. The poem flows nicely.
Well done and good luck in the contest
Cecilia
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Wow, this is a great deadly sin poem. The words are raw and paint a scene for the reader like they are sitting on the sidelines. The poem flows nicely.
Well done and good luck in the contest
Cecilia
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the review. That picture is glorious is it not? The words picked the drawing.
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You're welcome. That picture was beautiful.
Comment from Beejay
A very striking and powerful presentation, portraying one of the deadly sins, Lust. Great choice of font colour and background colour.
Good luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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A very striking and powerful presentation, portraying one of the deadly sins, Lust. Great choice of font colour and background colour.
Good luck in the contest...
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the review. When I first got here, I was against using pictures, and other additives. But I came to understand they all help explain our thoughts.
I love picking the font, the matting color, the font color, and the picture now. Thank you again.
Comment from Peter Jarvis
Your poem "Lust for Life" is a haunting and evocative exploration of loneliness and desire, fitting perfectly within the theme of the seven deadly sins. The imagery and tone create a vivid picture of longing and the eternal search for connection
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Your poem "Lust for Life" is a haunting and evocative exploration of loneliness and desire, fitting perfectly within the theme of the seven deadly sins. The imagery and tone create a vivid picture of longing and the eternal search for connection
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the review. When I first got here, I was against using pictures, and other additives. But I came to understand they all help explain our thoughts.
I love picking the font, the matting color, the font color, and the picture now. Thank you again.
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Take care
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Take care and stay safe.