Christmas Surprises
an unexpected romance6 total reviews
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
So, we can assume that Robin is working Pete over for her MRS? I guess she has one more night to earn it, and those intimate kisses--and the beer--will surely help.
An entertaining story with a twist for this mistletoe prompt.
I'm not sure why you mention the University of Nevada as the setting, as there was no real description of their surroundings, and it felt like this could take place at any college.
Good luck in the contest.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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So, we can assume that Robin is working Pete over for her MRS? I guess she has one more night to earn it, and those intimate kisses--and the beer--will surely help.
An entertaining story with a twist for this mistletoe prompt.
I'm not sure why you mention the University of Nevada as the setting, as there was no real description of their surroundings, and it felt like this could take place at any college.
Good luck in the contest.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much, Pam. The University of Nevada Reno then would accept any boy or girl who graduated from a Nevada high school. Tuition was affordable, so many fathers sent their daughters there to find a husband.
Comment from lancellot
This is interesting, but I think the ending will hurt it. Not much of a resolution after the build up with such a forward woman (unusual). You may want to reconsider it. People like happy endings. (guys too)
notes:
"I do," I said and thought You even more. Her green eyes sparkled and she smiled.
"You're in my Spanish class, but I don't know your name," she said.
-should be-
"I do," I said and thought You even more.
Her green eyes sparkled, and she smiled. "You're in my Spanish class, but I don't know your name."
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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This is interesting, but I think the ending will hurt it. Not much of a resolution after the build up with such a forward woman (unusual). You may want to reconsider it. People like happy endings. (guys too)
notes:
"I do," I said and thought You even more. Her green eyes sparkled and she smiled.
"You're in my Spanish class, but I don't know your name," she said.
-should be-
"I do," I said and thought You even more.
Her green eyes sparkled, and she smiled. "You're in my Spanish class, but I don't know your name."
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much, lancellot, for reviewing my story and making suggestions. I did heed your suggestion about the two sentences.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A fun little old-fashioned tale (in many ways!) of romance at University... Heard of KKG and AKA but never KKK (except in other connotations)... Thanx for sharing and best of luck.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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A fun little old-fashioned tale (in many ways!) of romance at University... Heard of KKG and AKA but never KKK (except in other connotations)... Thanx for sharing and best of luck.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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So pleased you enjoyed this nostalgic tale. KKK is a fictitious sorority.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This first encounter sounds fruitful and promising and the Mistletoe served its purpose and I shall look out for it hanging up above as it may bring me some luck too! Ha ha ha, I loved your endearing story, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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This first encounter sounds fruitful and promising and the Mistletoe served its purpose and I shall look out for it hanging up above as it may bring me some luck too! Ha ha ha, I loved your endearing story, love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Dolly. Glad you enjoyed my tale.
Comment from Peter Jarvis
Your story is a delightful blend of nostalgia and romance, capturing the essence of a Christmas party in the early 1960s. The unexpected encounter under the mistletoe and the charming dialogue between Pete and Robin create a vivid and engaging narrative. The twist of Robin's reason for not returning adds depth and a touch of bittersweet reality to the tale.
Thank you for sharing this lovely piece. It's a wonderful reminder of the magic and surprises that can happen during the holiday season.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Your story is a delightful blend of nostalgia and romance, capturing the essence of a Christmas party in the early 1960s. The unexpected encounter under the mistletoe and the charming dialogue between Pete and Robin create a vivid and engaging narrative. The twist of Robin's reason for not returning adds depth and a touch of bittersweet reality to the tale.
Thank you for sharing this lovely piece. It's a wonderful reminder of the magic and surprises that can happen during the holiday season.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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I truly appreciate your wonderful review of my nostalgic tale, Peter.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
What a great story. I love that the mistletoe is involved in this story. I like how the little red head took Pete over to the mistletoe and kissed him. That was a bold move on her part.
Great job and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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What a great story. I love that the mistletoe is involved in this story. I like how the little red head took Pete over to the mistletoe and kissed him. That was a bold move on her part.
Great job and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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I am so pleased you enjoyed my nostalgic tale, Cecilia.
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You're welcome
Cecilia