Once I Was
My Life24 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Well, certainly a full life there, my lady -- although, loneliness seems to echo through the latter verse(s) there... Well written! ;) Thanx for sharing this evening! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Well, certainly a full life there, my lady -- although, loneliness seems to echo through the latter verse(s) there... Well written! ;) Thanx for sharing this evening! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Yvette,
Thank you for the beautiful review. I appreciate it.
Cecilia
Comment from DonandVicki
I gather form this poem of yours that you were once a Sailor? I was a Sailor for twenty four years and still have salt water in my veins. I enjoyed your poem very much.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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I gather form this poem of yours that you were once a Sailor? I was a Sailor for twenty four years and still have salt water in my veins. I enjoyed your poem very much.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Don andVicki,
I'm thinking Don was the sailor? Yes, I once was a sailor. Thank you for the wonderful review my friends.
Cecilia
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You did a good job with your poem.
-A good topic, and effective imagery and rhyme.
-You also tell a good story.
-You do a good job describing your
childhood; it isn't too different from mine.
-We would all ride our bikes around, too.
-It was a simpler life in some ways.
-You do a good job with the third verse
"Trying to navigate unknown."
-A good concluding couplet.
-Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-You did a good job with your poem.
-A good topic, and effective imagery and rhyme.
-You also tell a good story.
-You do a good job describing your
childhood; it isn't too different from mine.
-We would all ride our bikes around, too.
-It was a simpler life in some ways.
-You do a good job with the third verse
"Trying to navigate unknown."
-A good concluding couplet.
-Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Pam,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I appreciate you.
Cecilia
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Tim Margetts
Age is a misconception brought about by some random set or figures based on how many laps you have run around our celestial mistress.
I am not old, but I have completed a fair number of laps.
Tim x
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Age is a misconception brought about by some random set or figures based on how many laps you have run around our celestial mistress.
I am not old, but I have completed a fair number of laps.
Tim x
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Tim,
My check engine light came on at 50 and it hasn't shut off.
Cecilia
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I pulled the fuses from my warning lights years back as I thoght it was the wrong time of year for Christma lights
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Tim,
You're a funny guy.
Comment from Nicki.B
We really did get a little pit stop of your life here written beautifully. So that boat right there, did you work on this? Were you a marine?
I was laughing at the punchline of the poem. 'Now I'm old with Fanstory friends' lol! I think its amazing how we think, I'm in my mid-forties and I think I'm getting old and when I was in my thirties I thought wow I'm getting old. My kids think I'm ancient.
You're only a spring chicken!!!
Have a great day friend :)
Nicki xoxo
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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We really did get a little pit stop of your life here written beautifully. So that boat right there, did you work on this? Were you a marine?
I was laughing at the punchline of the poem. 'Now I'm old with Fanstory friends' lol! I think its amazing how we think, I'm in my mid-forties and I think I'm getting old and when I was in my thirties I thought wow I'm getting old. My kids think I'm ancient.
You're only a spring chicken!!!
Have a great day friend :)
Nicki xoxo
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Nicki,
Thank you for the wonderful review. You are too funny my friend. I wish I was a spring chicken i'm 62 and that's why I feel old. My check engine light came on at 50 and it never shut off. Yes, I was in the US Navy a sailor not a marine and the picture of the ship I downloaded from fan art. I never served on a ship. I was lucky that way I served from 1982-1998. I was 19 when I joined and basically grew up in the navy.
Cecilia xoxo
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Ah you're hilarious you are a young woman!!!! I love that my engine light came on at 50, a good one for a poem lol! Wow that's interesting I thought everyone in the Navy would work on a ship at some point or doing training.
Chat soon x
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When I first went in the Navy in 1982 women were not allowed on ships. It wasn't until the early 90's that women were on ships. The first ship allowing women had to come back early because half of the females were pregnant. There was another incident where several women had a little prostitute ring going the commander of the ship found out and they got in trouble. It was a mess. I don't know what they were thinking when they put women on ship with horny men. I got out in 1998 when my enlistment was up otherwise my last tour of duty would have been with a squadron who deployed to a ship.
Fun times
Comment from EeanBlack
Were you truly a sailor? That would be awesome. If not, it brought back memories. I was stationed aboard the USS Acadia, a destroyer tender out of San Diego. Anyway, it's not that bad getting old. Just remember to be a friend to yourself. It's just like a relationship. If you aren't good for yourself, you won't be good for anyone else. Good poem.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Were you truly a sailor? That would be awesome. If not, it brought back memories. I was stationed aboard the USS Acadia, a destroyer tender out of San Diego. Anyway, it's not that bad getting old. Just remember to be a friend to yourself. It's just like a relationship. If you aren't good for yourself, you won't be good for anyone else. Good poem.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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EeanBlack,
Thank you for the wonderful review. Yes, I was really a sailor. I served from 1982-1998 best years of my life. I know its not bad getting old, but the check engine light came on at 50 and just won't shut off. Choices we made when you.
Cecilia
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Yes, sailors party.
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Yes, we do. I think I fried some brain cells along the way. Ha, Ha
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lol
Comment from jake cosmos aller
great poem filled with profound deep meaning. I have written a number of poems on similar lines looking back at life and wondering what would have happened if I had taken a different path.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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great poem filled with profound deep meaning. I have written a number of poems on similar lines looking back at life and wondering what would have happened if I had taken a different path.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Jake,
Thank you so much for a wonderful review. I also how things would have been on a different path. I wanted to be a nurse, but I was young and dumb and dropped out of nursing school with six months to go. So, I took path B and joined the Navy at 19 where I basically grew up.
I got out after 16 1/2 years. It was a great ride.
Cecilia
Comment from royowen
Heh heh, I like this Cecilia I don't think there are too many that are young on fanstory, but yes, there are certainly memories of youthful escapades, but we still lunch and dine with close friends and family, well done, Cecilia beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Heh heh, I like this Cecilia I don't think there are too many that are young on fanstory, but yes, there are certainly memories of youthful escapades, but we still lunch and dine with close friends and family, well done, Cecilia beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Roy,
Thank you for your beautiful review. I appreciate you my friend.
Cecilia
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Our lives do change as we travel this journey. Thank you for sharing your journey with us. I enjoyed reading. The flow and the rhyming scheme were excellent.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Our lives do change as we travel this journey. Thank you for sharing your journey with us. I enjoyed reading. The flow and the rhyming scheme were excellent.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Barbara,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I appreciate you.
Cecilia
Comment from Jim Wile
I enjoyed this nostalgic view of your life, Cecilia. It's always interesting to see the things that stand out in a poet's mind and the things they choose to represent their life. This sounds like a neat theme for a poem.
Did the prompt say to end it with "and now I'm..." after all the "Once I was's?"
In two lines, I would encapsulate my life this way:
Once I was only a reader.
Now I'm a writer too.
You did a great job with this poem, and it's nice to be included as one of your FanStory friends, my friend.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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I enjoyed this nostalgic view of your life, Cecilia. It's always interesting to see the things that stand out in a poet's mind and the things they choose to represent their life. This sounds like a neat theme for a poem.
Did the prompt say to end it with "and now I'm..." after all the "Once I was's?"
In two lines, I would encapsulate my life this way:
Once I was only a reader.
Now I'm a writer too.
You did a great job with this poem, and it's nice to be included as one of your FanStory friends, my friend.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Jim,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I appreciate you. No, the Once I was prompt didn't have and ending. However, that's a great idea.
Maybe I will come up with something for that Now I am. Thany you my friend.
Cecilia