Everlasting Love
It started with a kiss3 total reviews
Comment from Barry Penfold
Nice put together. Flows well and tells a good story. Thanks for sharing and all the best for the contest. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Nice put together. Flows well and tells a good story. Thanks for sharing and all the best for the contest. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Thanks Barry
Lovely review
Take care
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Thanks Barry
Lovely review
Take care
Comment from lancellot
This is a nice FanStory tale. You all the needed elements to win, set in the past (1960s), a senior couple still in love, and a positive theme at Christmas to fit with the contest. The only thing what may hold you back, is the lack on paragraph spacing. If you fix that, you could win. you still may, but it will increase your chances.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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This is a nice FanStory tale. You all the needed elements to win, set in the past (1960s), a senior couple still in love, and a positive theme at Christmas to fit with the contest. The only thing what may hold you back, is the lack on paragraph spacing. If you fix that, you could win. you still may, but it will increase your chances.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your helpful review. I agree about the lack of paragraph spacing and has been fixed.
Take care and thanks
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a lovely story with a nice touch added by using the two characters as elders in a nursing care home on Christmas Eve. I know how elderly folks can fall in love all over again when meeting at a nursing home during the holidays. I worked at a care home for a month and found that those with dementia or Alzheimers cozied up to one another for the comforts of loving attention together they would be as one while they were far away from loved ones during the pandemic.
I can imagine how your parents feel in a similar situation as the ones I cared for. What a beautiful sentiment.
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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This is a lovely story with a nice touch added by using the two characters as elders in a nursing care home on Christmas Eve. I know how elderly folks can fall in love all over again when meeting at a nursing home during the holidays. I worked at a care home for a month and found that those with dementia or Alzheimers cozied up to one another for the comforts of loving attention together they would be as one while they were far away from loved ones during the pandemic.
I can imagine how your parents feel in a similar situation as the ones I cared for. What a beautiful sentiment.
Jesse
Comment Written 12-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Hi Jesse
Thank you for your detailed review. I used to a lay inspector for care homes and I have seen delightful scenes of life long affection.
Take care.
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Yes, it is great to represent the under-represented. People in care homes are often forgotten.
Enjoy the day.
Jesse
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Take care and stay safe