Gun Mondo
gun Mondo about Gun Violence4 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Thank you for participating in the Japanese Poetry Club event. Good entry. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Your syllable count is wrong.
I like the theme. I agree with you.
Good job,
Gypsy
do guns kill people? 5 syllables is okay
do they create gun ghosts? 6 syllables (you need 7, not six)
do people even care at all? 8 syllables (you need 7, not 8)
guns do kill people 5 syllables is right
it is what they are designed for 8 syllables (you need 7, not 8)
it is their buddha nature 7 syllables is okay
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Thank you for participating in the Japanese Poetry Club event. Good entry. Beautiful presentation and imagery. Your syllable count is wrong.
I like the theme. I agree with you.
Good job,
Gypsy
do guns kill people? 5 syllables is okay
do they create gun ghosts? 6 syllables (you need 7, not six)
do people even care at all? 8 syllables (you need 7, not 8)
guns do kill people 5 syllables is right
it is what they are designed for 8 syllables (you need 7, not 8)
it is their buddha nature 7 syllables is okay
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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thanks I fixed the count
Comment from Darlene BoClair
You're asking a question we need to talk about but do not want to take responsibility to giviving a true answer. We want our guns and take no action in doing what we do with them. Guns you write with avenge.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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You're asking a question we need to talk about but do not want to take responsibility to giviving a true answer. We want our guns and take no action in doing what we do with them. Guns you write with avenge.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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thanks a lot
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I love how you ask such direct question and then dive into the truth about guns. The idea of their "Buddha nature" being tied to their purpose is so original. Your writing has this raw honesty that I really appreciate.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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I love how you ask such direct question and then dive into the truth about guns. The idea of their "Buddha nature" being tied to their purpose is so original. Your writing has this raw honesty that I really appreciate.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Thanks the idea of a buddha nature is a tenant of Buddhism = everything in life has its buddha nature - what it was designed to be for guns it is obviously to kill people and animals for bombs to blow shit up, and for men and women to find each other and become parents
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Jake,
Your poem expresses my, and many others' feelings. Guns do kill people.
In countries where guns are banned, there is less violence.
Great statement, Jake.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Jake,
Your poem expresses my, and many others' feelings. Guns do kill people.
In countries where guns are banned, there is less violence.
Great statement, Jake.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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thanks a lot Thanks the idea of a buddha nature is a tenant of Buddhism = everything in life has its buddha nature - what it was designed to be for guns it is obviously to kill people and animals for bombs to blow shit up, and for men and women to find each other and become parents