BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 37 "Glistening Treetops"Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
This is quite nice. I have written a couple. It can become addictive. I wish you happy holidays. It is colder here again. My body does not like this and tells me so quite loudly.HOHOHO Karen
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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This is quite nice. I have written a couple. It can become addictive. I wish you happy holidays. It is colder here again. My body does not like this and tells me so quite loudly.HOHOHO Karen
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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I hear you! I'm sensitive to too cold or too hot. Thank you for reading. I can see how they can be addictive. I'll have to read to find yours. Happy Holidays, too, my friend! 😊 Alex
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Bundle up cold is not my friend.
:-)
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Alexandra,
A lovely entry for the Renga book challenge.
Evergreen trees are strong and steadfast and take winter heartily, unlike some of us.
Great poem.
Have a blessed Christmas,
Cindy
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Alexandra,
A lovely entry for the Renga book challenge.
Evergreen trees are strong and steadfast and take winter heartily, unlike some of us.
Great poem.
Have a blessed Christmas,
Cindy
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Cindy! That's true. I've had a love for trees since I was young. God made them strong and they can even stay alive for hundreds of years because they renew their own stem cells. Always fascinated me.
Comment from Begin Again
I'm not a poet so I don't know any of the rules for a particular poem, but Ido know that your words makes the reader stop, imagine and enjoy. Very well done.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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I'm not a poet so I don't know any of the rules for a particular poem, but Ido know that your words makes the reader stop, imagine and enjoy. Very well done.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much, Carol! Smiles, Alex
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Alexandra,
Excellent chapter for our renga book. Thank you for participating. Good syllables count and connections between lines. You created a beautiful presentation and word imagery. The connection between the previous 7/7 and yours doesn't match. Renga poems need to follow the same theme to link them. Other than that, Well done!
check it out....
CHAPTER 36 a 7/7 stanza by June Sargent
My heart follows the path home
Where love and laughter reside
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CHAPTER 37 your 5/7/5
Winter snow glistens
Atop strong evergreen trees
Waiting to be seen
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maybe you could write something like this to link stanzas ...
outside snow glistens
atop evergreens and land
waiting to be seen
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Hello, Alexandra,
Excellent chapter for our renga book. Thank you for participating. Good syllables count and connections between lines. You created a beautiful presentation and word imagery. The connection between the previous 7/7 and yours doesn't match. Renga poems need to follow the same theme to link them. Other than that, Well done!
check it out....
CHAPTER 36 a 7/7 stanza by June Sargent
My heart follows the path home
Where love and laughter reside
======================
CHAPTER 37 your 5/7/5
Winter snow glistens
Atop strong evergreen trees
Waiting to be seen
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maybe you could write something like this to link stanzas ...
outside snow glistens
atop evergreens and land
waiting to be seen
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thank you! I can tweak mine. Should I?:)
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If I changed the last line to:
Where it finds it's home
? Possibly that would match the 7/7 better.
Please let me know and I'll update the poem.
Thank you,
Alexan
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Can you send me a copy of your 5-7-5?
This is the privious 7/7
my heart follows the path home
where love and laughter reside
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Yes, that's 👍 good
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Freshly fallen snow on the trees is absolutely beautiful. I enjoyed reading this renga. It flowed smoothly and the word you chose painted a wonderful picture in my mind. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Freshly fallen snow on the trees is absolutely beautiful. I enjoyed reading this renga. It flowed smoothly and the word you chose painted a wonderful picture in my mind. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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I'm glad. I love the beauty of trees and snowy teetops. Thank you!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed how your poem captures the beauty of winter. The imagery of the snow glistening on the evergreen trees is perfect. Your poem makes you want to pause and take in the moment. Great work!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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I really enjoyed how your poem captures the beauty of winter. The imagery of the snow glistening on the evergreen trees is perfect. Your poem makes you want to pause and take in the moment. Great work!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much!