Can Man Not Live in Peace?
I can just dream of world peace7 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
Our leaders are focused on power and to have it they are prepared to go to war.
They don't have the people's best interest in mind.
They don't care how many fathers , brothers, husbands die
They don't care about the children dying.
I saw Trump , Macron and Zelensky acting all chummy as if they were old friends at the ceremony of the Notre Dame.
I'm sure a mega dinner followed.
In the meantime children in Gaza are starving to death.
40,00 civilians have been killed , 17.000 were children.
Our leaders don't care, they don't lose sleep.
After the pandemic I thought nations would finally come together to get mankind back on track .
Instead America and Russia again at war.
Just destruction and death.
I felt your plea.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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Ciao !
Our leaders are focused on power and to have it they are prepared to go to war.
They don't have the people's best interest in mind.
They don't care how many fathers , brothers, husbands die
They don't care about the children dying.
I saw Trump , Macron and Zelensky acting all chummy as if they were old friends at the ceremony of the Notre Dame.
I'm sure a mega dinner followed.
In the meantime children in Gaza are starving to death.
40,00 civilians have been killed , 17.000 were children.
Our leaders don't care, they don't lose sleep.
After the pandemic I thought nations would finally come together to get mankind back on track .
Instead America and Russia again at war.
Just destruction and death.
I felt your plea.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2024
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And now Assad joins them!
Oh what joy.
Take care, my friend
Comment from Nicki.B
Well I have never seen one of these, a stacked 5-7-5! You have done a great job here building the poem into stacks!
It's a really beautiful wish / dream of peace throughout. Children unfortunately suffer the most I believe. Gorgeous poem of hole this is, I particularly like the 2nd last stack.
In stanza 3 should 'stands' be 'stand'. I'm not fabulous at grammar but maybe check that one out!
Wonderful well done!
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Well I have never seen one of these, a stacked 5-7-5! You have done a great job here building the poem into stacks!
It's a really beautiful wish / dream of peace throughout. Children unfortunately suffer the most I believe. Gorgeous poem of hole this is, I particularly like the 2nd last stack.
In stanza 3 should 'stands' be 'stand'. I'm not fabulous at grammar but maybe check that one out!
Wonderful well done!
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Many thanks for your kind review.
Blessings
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I love this stacked 575. Using one's voice to promote peace is the most valuable and powerful act. I'm a peace person, too. Much of my writing and art has that theme.
I found a change to make. Noun Verb agreement. Silent olive trees
Stands (Olive trees stand).
Great work! Best wishes!
Alex
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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I love this stacked 575. Using one's voice to promote peace is the most valuable and powerful act. I'm a peace person, too. Much of my writing and art has that theme.
I found a change to make. Noun Verb agreement. Silent olive trees
Stands (Olive trees stand).
Great work! Best wishes!
Alex
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Hi Alex
Thank you for your kind words and for pointing out the correction! It's wonderful to hear that you also focus on themes of peace in your writing and art. Promoting peace is indeed a powerful act, and it's inspiring to know there are others who share this passion.
If we are not careful then man will destroy our planet. One push of that nuclear button....!
Thank you for your 6 stars
Your revision sounds interesting - can you confirm what you would like to read.
Bless you and take great care.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Quite a grand vision presented in a well-written stack here -- great idea for an entry! ;) Thanx for sharing your pen and best of luck in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Quite a grand vision presented in a well-written stack here -- great idea for an entry! ;) Thanx for sharing your pen and best of luck in the contest! :)
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your kind words and encouragement! I'm glad you enjoyed the entry. It's always wonderful to connect with fellow writers who appreciate the craft. Best of luck to you in your writing endeavors as well!
Take care
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed how your poem paints a picture of peace. Your poem is full of warmth and positivity. I found it to be an uplifting read. It's clear you have a strong belief in the power of love. Keep sharing that hope through your words!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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I really enjoyed how your poem paints a picture of peace. Your poem is full of warmth and positivity. I found it to be an uplifting read. It's clear you have a strong belief in the power of love. Keep sharing that hope through your words!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Hi Michael
Many thanks for your kind words. I despair of this world sometimes: man is gradually destroying it.
Regards.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Author,
Your compassionate goodwill poem is what we all wish for. Your words ring in peace and harmony. I hope this world experiences this on Christmas and the rest of the year.
Beautifully written, Petter.
Cindy
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Author,
Your compassionate goodwill poem is what we all wish for. Your words ring in peace and harmony. I hope this world experiences this on Christmas and the rest of the year.
Beautifully written, Petter.
Cindy
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Thank you and stay safe.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
World peace is a beautiful dream. The image of the Earth adds to the quest for peace and harmony. I must admit a typo I noticed in the second verse it is where you write borders fade away. You misspell 'fade' so that it works against this wonderful dream. Otherwise, I would give you a six this is so profound and powerful a poem.
Jesse
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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World peace is a beautiful dream. The image of the Earth adds to the quest for peace and harmony. I must admit a typo I noticed in the second verse it is where you write borders fade away. You misspell 'fade' so that it works against this wonderful dream. Otherwise, I would give you a six this is so profound and powerful a poem.
Jesse
Comment Written 09-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Hi Jessie
Thank you for lovely review and for spotting my typo, which I have now corrected.
Take care
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Glad I could help. Good luck.
Jesse