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Comment from mslink1
I do believe ALCREATOR you have topped even some of your best writes.
I'm a little surprised you did you write this in short story form, although you almost did,lol.
There is much to grasp in the piece and I read it twice. I can only say, I agree and feel the writers passion flowing through each line. I cannot pick out a favorite line, verse for they all speak and enrich my thoughts. This is a deep insightful piece of poetry. I can better say it with my rating. Well done and said, Mary.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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I do believe ALCREATOR you have topped even some of your best writes.
I'm a little surprised you did you write this in short story form, although you almost did,lol.
There is much to grasp in the piece and I read it twice. I can only say, I agree and feel the writers passion flowing through each line. I cannot pick out a favorite line, verse for they all speak and enrich my thoughts. This is a deep insightful piece of poetry. I can better say it with my rating. Well done and said, Mary.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR SUCH A REVIEW WITH STARRY RATING.
I DO APPRECIATE YOUR HONEST APPRECIATION AND GLOWING RATING. I FEEL MUCH HONORED WITH YOUR ORDER OF MERIT TO MY WORK.
YOUR WORDS MADE MY DAY DAZZLINE ONE INDEED.
WITH BEST WISHES.
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DAZZLINE (DAZZLING) -- TYPO.
Comment from JoAnna Lee
Very well done... a bit hard to read in places as to the historical content and to the "conversations" being so plausibly true... the santimonious justifications projected to push forward.
A bit long, but worth the read...
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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Very well done... a bit hard to read in places as to the historical content and to the "conversations" being so plausibly true... the santimonious justifications projected to push forward.
A bit long, but worth the read...
Thanks for sharing,
Donna
Comment Written 16-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THIS NICE REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE.
Comment from joyshri
Very vivid, moving, frightening, chilling. The words are well chosen and expressive. I can understand the feelings expressed now that another macabre anniversary approaches. It is very sad that a few have interpreted Islam for their own gains. The Quran is full of the daily truths that govern all humanity, as is every other faith.These are good values but the jihadis have twisted them and made them notorious. When will the bloodshed end? When will we become "US" rather than "them" and "we"? Perhaps dialogue and an effort to understand will change the situation we are in now. How long will it take? What will our children face? Only when ALL of us get down to finding a solution, will things improve. Joyshri.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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Very vivid, moving, frightening, chilling. The words are well chosen and expressive. I can understand the feelings expressed now that another macabre anniversary approaches. It is very sad that a few have interpreted Islam for their own gains. The Quran is full of the daily truths that govern all humanity, as is every other faith.These are good values but the jihadis have twisted them and made them notorious. When will the bloodshed end? When will we become "US" rather than "them" and "we"? Perhaps dialogue and an effort to understand will change the situation we are in now. How long will it take? What will our children face? Only when ALL of us get down to finding a solution, will things improve. Joyshri.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THIS PROFESSIONAL REVIEW WITH HONEST VIEWS I DO APPRECIATE MUCH, PARTICULARLY YOUR PHILOSOPHICAL POINT OF VIEW.
Comment from DEEPTI GUPTA
Very touching poem !
" Three cheers to our 9/11 mision
The job is over
States' pride's marooned
Soaring towers are now dust
Nation's back bone is frozen "
I was lost in the past tragedy. The poem
left a sad impact on my heart . Emotions and feelings have made the
poem intense and wonderful .
My hearty warm wishes !!
Deepti
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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Very touching poem !
" Three cheers to our 9/11 mision
The job is over
States' pride's marooned
Soaring towers are now dust
Nation's back bone is frozen "
I was lost in the past tragedy. The poem
left a sad impact on my heart . Emotions and feelings have made the
poem intense and wonderful .
My hearty warm wishes !!
Deepti
Comment Written 16-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS FOR THIS REVIEW. YOU MAY LIKE EVEN BETTER IF YOU READ IT NOW.
Comment from sandramarie
AL, I think you have outdone yourself! This was original, creative
and outstanding. You capture the chilling mood of the terrorists
counting up there kills. I'm impressed.
Thanks for sharing.
Sandy
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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AL, I think you have outdone yourself! This was original, creative
and outstanding. You capture the chilling mood of the terrorists
counting up there kills. I'm impressed.
Thanks for sharing.
Sandy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2006
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THANKS FOR THIS NICE, HONEST REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE.
Comment from therealelouise
Alcreator-
What an interesting read. I felt disgusting all over again. Like it was 9/11/01. Lest we never forget. I loved the hypocrytical dialogue and interesting take on the news coverage...How it was in a way advantagious to them. I hope many people read this and understand. Best of Luck!
-Elouise
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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Alcreator-
What an interesting read. I felt disgusting all over again. Like it was 9/11/01. Lest we never forget. I loved the hypocrytical dialogue and interesting take on the news coverage...How it was in a way advantagious to them. I hope many people read this and understand. Best of Luck!
-Elouise
Comment Written 15-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THIS REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE.
Comment from cutie
interesting and need to work on it to figure out more things than seeable side,piece...maybe font color not easily readable because of lack of boldness or pink background's consistency,
perfect work as always that all your works urge!!
thanks !!
thanks!!
thanks!!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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interesting and need to work on it to figure out more things than seeable side,piece...maybe font color not easily readable because of lack of boldness or pink background's consistency,
perfect work as always that all your works urge!!
thanks !!
thanks!!
thanks!!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THIS AUTHENTIC AND HONEST REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.
Comment from Senyai
A very memorable account of 9-11. Your verse gives an inside view from the terrorist watching their handiwork unfold on television. I remember that day, too. It was horrible. At first I didn't understand what I was seeing, then it became crystal clear in a flash. It had happened on our soil.
I thought your conversational tone of presenting the day was very effective. Well done, Allcreator Writer. Well done.
Foxey
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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A very memorable account of 9-11. Your verse gives an inside view from the terrorist watching their handiwork unfold on television. I remember that day, too. It was horrible. At first I didn't understand what I was seeing, then it became crystal clear in a flash. It had happened on our soil.
I thought your conversational tone of presenting the day was very effective. Well done, Allcreator Writer. Well done.
Foxey
Comment Written 15-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THIS HONEST AND FAIR REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.
Comment from Homespring
Al---It seems that a person who speaks a foreign language expresses words differently than most. For instance, "Don't pride." This is strange to me. The language in your poems is different as well. Your poem reads like a list, but the images are full of truth. I thank you for taking the time to write this dialogue in defense of all Americans. It is an excellent rendition of all the horrible things that the Jihad inflicted upon us in 9-11. I do have one question. In the line, "Of nine Jihad soldiers and ministers, there are 6 casualties only sir." Since these dead men are considered martyrs, why do they care how many of them died? Just a thought. Thanks for your heart felt work and effort. It is much appreciated. Homespring
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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Al---It seems that a person who speaks a foreign language expresses words differently than most. For instance, "Don't pride." This is strange to me. The language in your poems is different as well. Your poem reads like a list, but the images are full of truth. I thank you for taking the time to write this dialogue in defense of all Americans. It is an excellent rendition of all the horrible things that the Jihad inflicted upon us in 9-11. I do have one question. In the line, "Of nine Jihad soldiers and ministers, there are 6 casualties only sir." Since these dead men are considered martyrs, why do they care how many of them died? Just a thought. Thanks for your heart felt work and effort. It is much appreciated. Homespring
Comment Written 14-Aug-2006
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THANKS FOR THIS REVIEW AND ADVICE I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.
Comment from chelsmor
This is a most creative and inventive work which holds its power in the historical and ongoing terrorism to which we are currently subjected. It is long, and necessarily so to portray the depth of abject insanity behind the acts of violence.
The style of your work here is unique, I admire the ability to make perfect line breaks and use your own original language to make this prose poetic. I love the color use in the long stanza - especially 'blackly black' and your choice to use blood red font on innocent pink background.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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This is a most creative and inventive work which holds its power in the historical and ongoing terrorism to which we are currently subjected. It is long, and necessarily so to portray the depth of abject insanity behind the acts of violence.
The style of your work here is unique, I admire the ability to make perfect line breaks and use your own original language to make this prose poetic. I love the color use in the long stanza - especially 'blackly black' and your choice to use blood red font on innocent pink background.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THIS AWESOME, HONEST, FAIR, PROFESSIONAL REVIEW WITH HIGH ORDER OF APPRECIATION I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.
