Oh Life!
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Comment from Ulla
Yes, it was horrible what happened back then. But the world is moving on, whether we like it or not. I loved your poem. So full of rich imagery. All best, Ulla:)))
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Yes, it was horrible what happened back then. But the world is moving on, whether we like it or not. I loved your poem. So full of rich imagery. All best, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
God is religion free...and never a truer word spoken. God can be there for anyone and for all. Organized religion created by man caused a divide that has seen so many die by the sword it does not even seem feasible that we should separate when we all believe in a certain type of God. The God I know will not fail us in the end. This I know. well done kindest regards M x
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God is religion free...and never a truer word spoken. God can be there for anyone and for all. Organized religion created by man caused a divide that has seen so many die by the sword it does not even seem feasible that we should separate when we all believe in a certain type of God. The God I know will not fail us in the end. This I know. well done kindest regards M x
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
Comment from Janetsue
You paint a strong picture of the evil acts of certain people whose hearts are fully corrupted by outright sin. It most likely took a long time to write. It helps put across the mindset of people who love death and destruction.
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You paint a strong picture of the evil acts of certain people whose hearts are fully corrupted by outright sin. It most likely took a long time to write. It helps put across the mindset of people who love death and destruction.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
Comment from Boogienights
This is an interesting concept. I found it heartbreaking that any human being would find joy in destruction and in taking human lives. I imagine you are correct in the dialog that occurred between these monsters. I will be honest though...I find your work very hard to read and follow. I always come back to it though, there's just something about it.
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This is an interesting concept. I found it heartbreaking that any human being would find joy in destruction and in taking human lives. I imagine you are correct in the dialog that occurred between these monsters. I will be honest though...I find your work very hard to read and follow. I always come back to it though, there's just something about it.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Ingenious concept--aftermath of devastation stunningly rendered through a conversation of the eveil masterminds.
Sugg:
[OMIT bluish] azure
[OMIT yellowish] gold
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Ingenious concept--aftermath of devastation stunningly rendered through a conversation of the eveil masterminds.
Sugg:
[OMIT bluish] azure
[OMIT yellowish] gold
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think you got into the minds of those jihad monsters well. I believe they are satan's men and women, you can tell by the way they revel in the monstrous deeds they perform. Who can enjoy such things? They cannot be human, or sane. You told this story well, true though it is, and I believe that a phone call such as this one, did take place. Goodness me! How sick. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
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I think you got into the minds of those jihad monsters well. I believe they are satan's men and women, you can tell by the way they revel in the monstrous deeds they perform. Who can enjoy such things? They cannot be human, or sane. You told this story well, true though it is, and I believe that a phone call such as this one, did take place. Goodness me! How sick. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
Comment from amahra
This read like a short story outlining the minute-by-minute details of America's worst nightmare--a catastrophe So many American lives lost. on US soil. Very well written. Great job.
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This read like a short story outlining the minute-by-minute details of America's worst nightmare--a catastrophe So many American lives lost. on US soil. Very well written. Great job.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
Comment from Bonnie Seach
I perceive a lot of work involved in this poem. It is a strong outcry on behalf of mankind protesting crimes against humanity. I understand it to be written in 3rd person. The spokesperson resounds a message that crosses all boundaries of race, colour, creed, class and tradition. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes
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I perceive a lot of work involved in this poem. It is a strong outcry on behalf of mankind protesting crimes against humanity. I understand it to be written in 3rd person. The spokesperson resounds a message that crosses all boundaries of race, colour, creed, class and tradition. Thank you for sharing. Best wishes
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
Comment from Ricky1024
What I liked about this was it very quickly allowed you into the world of 911 which is a terrorist dream and Americans nightmare!
We had a chance to stop it with the underground bombing with the fertilizer months previous we should have known something else would have happened.
I know of one person who actually had a nightmare of this happening only days before.
It's sort of like Nostradamus and his prediction with the two big birds flying into the buildings.
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America since awakened as a sleeping giant.
Our past president predicted we'd have problems with China in the future and now look what's happening?
Silliness of America?
Are we too big for our britches?
Or are we still in need of being diapered?
The theme and imagery worked well together here.
It's especially noticeable with the conversation between the two terrorists.
Bringing in the jihad factor and then the Muslim religion brought Adjective and Objective Contents into play.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
PS.
My poem that I wrote many years ago would work well with this entitled,
"Hell on Earth Damn it to Shame!"
(Is this Satan's Grim game?)
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What I liked about this was it very quickly allowed you into the world of 911 which is a terrorist dream and Americans nightmare!
We had a chance to stop it with the underground bombing with the fertilizer months previous we should have known something else would have happened.
I know of one person who actually had a nightmare of this happening only days before.
It's sort of like Nostradamus and his prediction with the two big birds flying into the buildings.
...
America since awakened as a sleeping giant.
Our past president predicted we'd have problems with China in the future and now look what's happening?
Silliness of America?
Are we too big for our britches?
Or are we still in need of being diapered?
The theme and imagery worked well together here.
It's especially noticeable with the conversation between the two terrorists.
Bringing in the jihad factor and then the Muslim religion brought Adjective and Objective Contents into play.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Doctor Ricky 1024
PS.
My poem that I wrote many years ago would work well with this entitled,
"Hell on Earth Damn it to Shame!"
(Is this Satan's Grim game?)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2021
Comment from Bill Schott
This is an interesting account of what is most probably a true account of conversations between the ignorant agents of middle-east businessmen attempting to eliminate their competition in the west through the guise of religion. Same story, different century.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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This is an interesting account of what is most probably a true account of conversations between the ignorant agents of middle-east businessmen attempting to eliminate their competition in the west through the guise of religion. Same story, different century.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice professional review
