My Marriage Was Buried In Ice
Something all relationships experience at some time, maybe f7 total reviews
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
What a great story and you say it's satire, but it is true. Woman once we reach a certain age could care less if we ever had sex again. Men seem to have this drive that never stops.
This was a great story.
Cecilia
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What a great story and you say it's satire, but it is true. Woman once we reach a certain age could care less if we ever had sex again. Men seem to have this drive that never stops.
This was a great story.
Cecilia
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
When I was born in 1955, girls were told that we must endure marital relations in order to have children. Boys were told, you are entitled to have sex whenever you want because you are a male. This is 100% wrong on both parts.
Is it a wonder things are so screwed up? By the way, the snake in the garden was a male snake. Karen
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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When I was born in 1955, girls were told that we must endure marital relations in order to have children. Boys were told, you are entitled to have sex whenever you want because you are a male. This is 100% wrong on both parts.
Is it a wonder things are so screwed up? By the way, the snake in the garden was a male snake. Karen
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Thanks forever. The story was written for the contest, glad to say I not had those experiences. I was brought up differently than how you described the situations we faced. My mother and grandmother would have never allowed that. All women were to be respected and honored at all times.
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That's what my mother and her mother said also. However, the rest of the world still hasn't caught up. :-)
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We grew up in a different age, different community. Small town western Colorado, work hard, the rewards will show themselves. Girls confused me, why wife still does.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
This is a pretty sad piece. It's terribly unfair to change the terms of an agreement after the fact. When situations do change, there needs to be some conversation about it.
yes they were more than willing to bragg about how much - (brag)
Best wishes.
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This is a pretty sad piece. It's terribly unfair to change the terms of an agreement after the fact. When situations do change, there needs to be some conversation about it.
yes they were more than willing to bragg about how much - (brag)
Best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
Comment from lancellot
I get the theme. I've covered a few times myself. There are few answers but there are some. Now, the main issue that the author should address is, the poor editing and SPAG throughout the post. I strongly recommend going over this with a pen or marker, then fix before the voting starts.
And saying Ice or frozen related terms so many times isn't needed.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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I get the theme. I've covered a few times myself. There are few answers but there are some. Now, the main issue that the author should address is, the poor editing and SPAG throughout the post. I strongly recommend going over this with a pen or marker, then fix before the voting starts.
And saying Ice or frozen related terms so many times isn't needed.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Thanks, this was written, as many things I write, from my mind set at that time. This was truly done as a satire, but that was not an option. I am not clear on what you recommended, as I am new to this process. I did proofread this and found some spelling errors. Not sure how to edit or what SPAG stands for, doesn't sound good though. I will continue to write things as they come to me out of the blue.
Comment from Zach Gallows
The story itself isn't bad, a lot of people can relate to those feelings in a dead end marriage. However, the story is just absolutely riddled with typos and grammatical errors. It feels like it was written in a different language and put through a translator. I would recommend a strong proofreading.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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The story itself isn't bad, a lot of people can relate to those feelings in a dead end marriage. However, the story is just absolutely riddled with typos and grammatical errors. It feels like it was written in a different language and put through a translator. I would recommend a strong proofreading.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2024
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Not sure what I should do, I wish I understood more clearly where the typos and grammatical errors are, as I did try and reread this again. Just too new to the literary concepts of how to write better. These writings just come to my head, not really thimging of anything else. If you can tell me what I should have done better. I was a practicing Veterinarian for 30 years, had to learn things over as time changed and you learn how to do things better.
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I would suggest picking up a book on grammar. The Elements of Style is one usually brought up since it's written to help writers. If the story is stream of consciousness then a lot of the errors can get by but it switches around tenses at times. Don't feel bad, grammar is hard. It helps to get a second or even third set of eyes on something for a new perspective.
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I need to write extemporaneously, as my thoughts travel and I find I have to write without truly contemplating what I am writing or why. Many different thoughts occur and then disappear. If I tried to interpret them grammatically then the feeling is lost. I understand rules must apply. All I am trying is to write what comes to me at the time. Glad to say my marriage is not dead. Lucky me.
Comment from kahpot
responsebility" a typo here (responsibility) your story holds many truths, I really like the way your story comes to the ending and realizes that the situation may have been caused by both parties, a wonderful read, supplying many images to the reader, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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responsebility" a typo here (responsibility) your story holds many truths, I really like the way your story comes to the ending and realizes that the situation may have been caused by both parties, a wonderful read, supplying many images to the reader, very well done, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024
Comment from royowen
I guess there are so many reasons that relationships fail, and really believe self gets in the way, I guess it doesn't matter where, who or why, blame seems to be the way. This is beautifully written, well done, Blessings Roy
Typo : Not (know) the kids are awake. Now?
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I guess there are so many reasons that relationships fail, and really believe self gets in the way, I guess it doesn't matter where, who or why, blame seems to be the way. This is beautifully written, well done, Blessings Roy
Typo : Not (know) the kids are awake. Now?
Comment Written 07-Dec-2024