Dip Me
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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Free verse is amazingly honest yet surprisingly focused as your free verse poem indicates.
You have harnessed the power of one's emotions, and the cleansing power of water and applied it in an open, simple and effective manner.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Shirley
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Free verse is amazingly honest yet surprisingly focused as your free verse poem indicates.
You have harnessed the power of one's emotions, and the cleansing power of water and applied it in an open, simple and effective manner.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This reads like a single paragraph and it could be so much better. If you were to break it down into different lines you might say as an example.
Dip me inothe water
Where it warms my body
And chills my mind.
Then continue in this manner until you have finished the entire poem. Patricia.
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This reads like a single paragraph and it could be so much better. If you were to break it down into different lines you might say as an example.
Dip me inothe water
Where it warms my body
And chills my mind.
Then continue in this manner until you have finished the entire poem. Patricia.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A fun almost philosophical (spiritual?) offering for the contest here... And although I realize it's a 'free form' contest, it would be helpful to experience the weight/meaning of your statements if you chose a different format other than 'chapter reading' here -- you lose the whole 'poetry' feel when the reader jumps in and reads as though reading a single paragraph rather than a collection of poetic/reflective thoughts... Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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A fun almost philosophical (spiritual?) offering for the contest here... And although I realize it's a 'free form' contest, it would be helpful to experience the weight/meaning of your statements if you chose a different format other than 'chapter reading' here -- you lose the whole 'poetry' feel when the reader jumps in and reads as though reading a single paragraph rather than a collection of poetic/reflective thoughts... Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024