The Spirit of Spring
A Sonnet for Spring4 total reviews
Comment from Lea Tonin1
This is gorgeous. No wonder you've worn them.You deserve to.This is an amazing poem, this beautiful picture awesome imagery. Of your word choices, so remind me a little bit of myself, except you are much more refined. Great work congratulations!
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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This is gorgeous. No wonder you've worn them.You deserve to.This is an amazing poem, this beautiful picture awesome imagery. Of your word choices, so remind me a little bit of myself, except you are much more refined. Great work congratulations!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Lea,
Thank you for your congrats on the win and your 6-star review. Your comments humble me.
I read Follow-up with Lea Tonin! by Rachelle Allen and am pleased to tell you I purchased a Kindle copy of your book Ghost - A Story of Survival and look for to purchasing your future books when published.
All the best,
Eugene
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Oh, that's very kind of you. I hope you enjoy it well as much as it can be. Enjoyed given the subject matter. Yeah, I'm always open to critique. Whatever you may have this fine. I learned better that way.Yeah, I help you find it impactful.
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Lea,
Thank you for your congrats on the win and your 6-star review. Your comments humble me.
I read Follow-up with Lea Tonin! by Rachelle Allen and am pleased to tell you I purchased a Kindle copy of your book Ghost - A Story of Survival and look for to purchasing your future books when published.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment from Terry Reilly
A wonderful poem, and a worthy winner.
Imagery, balance, expression, creativity all top drawer.
You have a special gift.
Well done, Eugene. Congratulations.
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A wonderful poem, and a worthy winner.
Imagery, balance, expression, creativity all top drawer.
You have a special gift.
Well done, Eugene. Congratulations.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiment in this fine sonnet for the contest.
Suggestion for this line for the sake of metre:
(As the earth lifts its bride's new shining veil).
suggest:
(As earth lifts up a bride's new shining veil).
Check the metre on lines 9 and 11.
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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I enjoyed the sentiment in this fine sonnet for the contest.
Suggestion for this line for the sake of metre:
(As the earth lifts its bride's new shining veil).
suggest:
(As earth lifts up a bride's new shining veil).
Check the metre on lines 9 and 11.
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Dolly,
Thank you for your helpful review. I made the needed changes to the metre as per your comments in lines 8, 9 and 11. The result was a first place win.
You have been a great teacher and mentor. Your poetry has been my helpful guide and instructor guiding and helping me to become a better poet.
Kind regards,
Eugene
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Congratulations on your win Eugene and I am always glad to help, love Dolly x
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Eugene,
This is a well done Shakespearean sonnet about the beauty of Spring. You have some nice personification of all the parts of a Spring morning. The bride is a good metaphor for the hope in the start of a new life.
I think there is an extra space between the third and fourth lines of the third quatrain.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
P S If I didn't tell you before, I have just published a book titled "The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry". It is available on Amazon.com. There is a link to it at the bottom of my profile page or you can just go to Amazon.com and search Joan Pechter The Interloper.
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Hi Eugene,
This is a well done Shakespearean sonnet about the beauty of Spring. You have some nice personification of all the parts of a Spring morning. The bride is a good metaphor for the hope in the start of a new life.
I think there is an extra space between the third and fourth lines of the third quatrain.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
P S If I didn't tell you before, I have just published a book titled "The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry". It is available on Amazon.com. There is a link to it at the bottom of my profile page or you can just go to Amazon.com and search Joan Pechter The Interloper.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024