When Snowflakes Fall
It's whatever you want it to be.9 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Ah, that would be tragic indeed if " all the love I've kept repressed
Lives only in my youth". I think we repress more as we become adults but the great thing about aging, is that we can free ourselves of what others think and be free to express ourselves again.
I like your message of exuberance in your poem. I have to confess I've never done that tasting of snowflakes having grown up in Hawaii! :))
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
  |
Ah, that would be tragic indeed if " all the love I've kept repressed
Lives only in my youth". I think we repress more as we become adults but the great thing about aging, is that we can free ourselves of what others think and be free to express ourselves again.
I like your message of exuberance in your poem. I have to confess I've never done that tasting of snowflakes having grown up in Hawaii! :))
Comment Written 12-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2024
-
Oh darn, that must have been horrible. Sun and surf, swimming in the ocean must have made for a boring childhood. In Alaska, it actually snows on the ocean. Imagine riding that wave, right into a polar bears mouth. They are vicious.
-
Well, that sounds like the childhood of a seal. But it sounds cool to see it snowing on the ocean! I do miss swimming in the ocean because the water is too cold here even in the summer
-
You're funny.
-
Thank you? 😂 I'll take that as a compliment.
-
Also somewhat of a narcissist? LOL
-
I'd say the eternal optimist. Have to assume the best intentions.
-
Oh, wow. Hmm.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I swear I already reviewed it. This is well done, but a little sad too. Us old fogey's can have good friendship and love too. Have a good weekend. Happy holidays. Karen
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
|
I swear I already reviewed it. This is well done, but a little sad too. Us old fogey's can have good friendship and love too. Have a good weekend. Happy holidays. Karen
Comment Written 06-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2024
-
We can have friendships. That other four-letter word needs put to the knife. I hate poetry, but it pops out sometimes.
-
Love has many forms. Romantic love seems out of reach for me as well. Too many bad experiences. I don't believe anymore. But I love my family And I love my friends here. Which includes you sweet pea. :-)
-
I'm not the pea, I'm the pod. I like your attitude.
-
Thank you so much. Karen
-
Who are you calling Karen?
-
Very Funny.
Comment from pome lover
Eean, you always seem to make me Hmmm.
No love in the present? Surely some since your youth.
Snowflakes and snow angels have always seemed magical to me as we don't have snow. Sometimes when I watch the Hallmark channel and they always have winter scenes and snow, and I think, you know, a lot of people live where there isn't snow. They could change their venue sometimes.
But back to your poem. It is lovely and sad.
How are you feeling today?
Katharine
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
|
Eean, you always seem to make me Hmmm.
No love in the present? Surely some since your youth.
Snowflakes and snow angels have always seemed magical to me as we don't have snow. Sometimes when I watch the Hallmark channel and they always have winter scenes and snow, and I think, you know, a lot of people live where there isn't snow. They could change their venue sometimes.
But back to your poem. It is lovely and sad.
How are you feeling today?
Katharine
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
-
lol I think it is okay to make people think. We mostly see things from a singular perspective. I like to try and see things differently sometimes. As for health, I have had numerous shots for spinal pain and shoulder pain. I'll be better soon, I hope. Thanks.
-
I think you see things differently a lot of the time. Nothing wrong with that.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Although we try and keep our best memories safe at Christmas, not all past Christmases are happy and some of them we would rather forget.
I loved the sentiments here and your subtle words are well chosen here and this is a skilful write from a talented pen.
Suggestion for this line for the sake of metre:
(For at that moment, (I) express)
Love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
 |
Although we try and keep our best memories safe at Christmas, not all past Christmases are happy and some of them we would rather forget.
I loved the sentiments here and your subtle words are well chosen here and this is a skilful write from a talented pen.
Suggestion for this line for the sake of metre:
(For at that moment, (I) express)
Love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
-
You found something that I thought about for a long time. The word "express" used in the manner that I meant, would suggest the rapidity of movement or traveling at high speed, not to express. I don't know if it fits that way, but that is what I meant. Thanks.
Comment from ESOSTINE
I find the flow of your poem smooth with unforced rhymes. The last stanza of this lovely piece held me spellbound. Thanks so much for sharing your well written poem. My warmest regards.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
|
I find the flow of your poem smooth with unforced rhymes. The last stanza of this lovely piece held me spellbound. Thanks so much for sharing your well written poem. My warmest regards.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
-
Thank you.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A 'chilly' offering in abab rhyme scheme that brings forth a truth that all readers should truly ponder... Thanx so much for sharing your vision today! ;)
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
|
A 'chilly' offering in abab rhyme scheme that brings forth a truth that all readers should truly ponder... Thanx so much for sharing your vision today! ;)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
-
Sorry that I don't know what abab rhyme scheme is, but I try. thank you.
Comment from patcelaw
This is beautifully written about snowflakes falling. I enjoyed reading it very much and it looks pretty on the page. I would make one suggestion to you, and that is to get rid of the extra color at the bottom of the poem go back and click at the bottom of the Post and delete until you get up to the text and that will get rid of the access
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
|
This is beautifully written about snowflakes falling. I enjoyed reading it very much and it looks pretty on the page. I would make one suggestion to you, and that is to get rid of the extra color at the bottom of the poem go back and click at the bottom of the Post and delete until you get up to the text and that will get rid of the access
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
-
Thanks, I didn't notice.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
I didn't know you also wrote poetry. Nice surprise. This was lovely and romantic. The meter was flowing. Nice rhyme. My favorite line...Let us play on Winters sleeve. Hope to see more like this one
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
|
I didn't know you also wrote poetry. Nice surprise. This was lovely and romantic. The meter was flowing. Nice rhyme. My favorite line...Let us play on Winters sleeve. Hope to see more like this one
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
-
I do not write poetry...I've written three here, but they aren't really note-worthy. Poetry doesn't flow from me. It always feels coaxed. Thanks for reading.
-
I disagree. You obviously can and do write poetry. Trust me, the process is not always flowing and uncoated. The trick is to make it sound like it was. And you did. So stop talking crap about yourself or the queen of 6 stars will ask for your head!
-
Have you ever heard of the hydra from Greek mythology? Thank you for the motivational speech?
-
Heard of it? I AM it!
-
Lol. You said you would ask for my head, and they all started looking at each other like "oh crap" she's serious. I've dealt with vicious nine-headed snakes before. They still scare the crap out of me. Have a wonderful day Miss.
Comment from papa55mike
Then we take our youth and bring it forward to never lose it again while growing younger. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
|
Then we take our youth and bring it forward to never lose it again while growing younger. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
-
lol, that's better than what I wrote. Teach me. lol