Winter's Hush
Nature's slumber begins3 total reviews
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a great winter haiku poem. It has perfect flow to it. The picture you chose is beautiful and looks very tranquil.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
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This is a great winter haiku poem. It has perfect flow to it. The picture you chose is beautiful and looks very tranquil.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
Comment from RodG
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I like the Winter scene you describe in this haiku and your emphasis on sound (or the lack of it).
But using WHISPER(S) twice mars your poem for me. May I suggest using MURMUR in line 2?
Rod
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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** This reviewer has pledged to rate in accordance with the criteria outlined on the Q & A page.**
I like the Winter scene you describe in this haiku and your emphasis on sound (or the lack of it).
But using WHISPER(S) twice mars your poem for me. May I suggest using MURMUR in line 2?
Rod
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Rod,
Thank you for your helpful review. I appreciate your keen observation. I've revised the poem's second line as follows:
Bare trees shiver in the chill,
All the best,
BB50
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Your new version is much better, especially at creating ATMOSPHERE. I related your poem. It now has 5 stars.
Comment from Julie G1
The poet has composed a clear and apt response to this seasonal prompt. The total effect is enabled by the imagery and concise language. The picture chosen enhances the charm.
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The poet has composed a clear and apt response to this seasonal prompt. The total effect is enabled by the imagery and concise language. The picture chosen enhances the charm.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024