Wee Sons of Cain
Share a Story in a Poem entry6 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this story/poem contest entry with us. This was a fun entry to read. The rhyming scheme and near rhymes were excellent. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Thank you for sharing this story/poem contest entry with us. This was a fun entry to read. The rhyming scheme and near rhymes were excellent. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Thank you for reading and commenting. This was fun ti write, too. My sister says she can imagine little people skipping along to the tune of an Irish jig. Now that I look at it, I guess it could be a song, too.
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It could be. I see it too.
Comment from Lana Marie
You're a very good writer. I enjoyed reading your entry to this story in a poem. Your rhyming sequences made it easy to read. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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You're a very good writer. I enjoyed reading your entry to this story in a poem. Your rhyming sequences made it easy to read. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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Thanks for reading. This poem arose from me wondering if Cain had children.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
The rhythm of your poem made the whole piece feel like a song. And it pulled me along with it. The idea of the dance of life kept me interested.
Keep up the wonderful work!
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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The rhythm of your poem made the whole piece feel like a song. And it pulled me along with it. The idea of the dance of life kept me interested.
Keep up the wonderful work!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Michael. I started this as a poem only, but it took on a sing-song quality. I was worried it was a bit too long, but I'm glad it held your interest.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a great poem that tells a story quite nicely. Just when you think is being kind you find out it's all but a big lie. This poem flows smoothly for beginning to end.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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This is a great poem that tells a story quite nicely. Just when you think is being kind you find out it's all but a big lie. This poem flows smoothly for beginning to end.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024
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Thank you for reading and commenting, Cecilia. I admit the poem is a little grim (and a little Grimm!), but life is strange.
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You're welcome
Cecilia
Comment from royowen
I really like this work you've done very well, I love the progression, it's like the I inevitability of the seasons, they come and go, but still with the differences that come with the changing days having their own personality, well done, beautifully written. Good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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I really like this work you've done very well, I love the progression, it's like the I inevitability of the seasons, they come and go, but still with the differences that come with the changing days having their own personality, well done, beautifully written. Good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Thank you for your review and the pretty stars, Roy.
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Most welcime
Comment from lancellot
This is a bit different, and that is a good thing. It is a full story and like the lyrics winds a path for the reader to follow. We learn more about them as the story continues, and the pace and rhyme scheme make reading easy.
I think this should do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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This is a bit different, and that is a good thing. It is a full story and like the lyrics winds a path for the reader to follow. We learn more about them as the story continues, and the pace and rhyme scheme make reading easy.
I think this should do well in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024
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Thank you for reading and review. As a child, I was often put to bed with the stories of the Brothers Grimm.
