BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Winter Feelings"Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
21 total reviews
Comment from Michele Harber
I know little about Renga, but I can say you've perfectly captured in words the picture you've included. I enjoyed the image and the alliteration of "frozen in flight."
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I know little about Renga, but I can say you've perfectly captured in words the picture you've included. I enjoyed the image and the alliteration of "frozen in flight."
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello, Gloria!
Admittedly I had to read your exceptionally well-crafted Renga more than once to glean its entire meaning.
That's what I have always admired about your poetry: you make me ponder and think!
With economy of words, you create not only an interesting play on words but a beautiful observation as well.
Thank you for sharing!
fondly,
diane
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Hello, Gloria!
Admittedly I had to read your exceptionally well-crafted Renga more than once to glean its entire meaning.
That's what I have always admired about your poetry: you make me ponder and think!
With economy of words, you create not only an interesting play on words but a beautiful observation as well.
Thank you for sharing!
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Frozen in flight and in time, forever captured with wings out. A lovely photograph, Gloria and your simple words add to the beauty. I loved the second line. The beauty of photography is capturing those moments, as you have done with your words. Loved this one Gloria,
cheers,
valda
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Frozen in flight and in time, forever captured with wings out. A lovely photograph, Gloria and your simple words add to the beauty. I loved the second line. The beauty of photography is capturing those moments, as you have done with your words. Loved this one Gloria,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
Comment from Debbie Pope
This little 7-7 poem is simple, yet artistic. The title adds so much meaning to the poem. Without the title, the clever use of the word "frozen" would be lost. The title in conjunction with the image makes me "feel" winter from the perspective of wildlife and humans.
It's a nice little poem.
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This little 7-7 poem is simple, yet artistic. The title adds so much meaning to the poem. Without the title, the clever use of the word "frozen" would be lost. The title in conjunction with the image makes me "feel" winter from the perspective of wildlife and humans.
It's a nice little poem.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I love poems about herons. Your chapter has a zen feeling... very calming.
Excellent chapter for our Renga Book. The Renga form has the right renga composition. Beautiful presentation. Good syllables and connection between lines. Thank you for participating in our book with such a beautiful verse.
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I love poems about herons. Your chapter has a zen feeling... very calming.
Excellent chapter for our Renga Book. The Renga form has the right renga composition. Beautiful presentation. Good syllables and connection between lines. Thank you for participating in our book with such a beautiful verse.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
Comment from karenina
Every entry in this Book of Renga has been stimulating. Some write the first three lines, in 5-7-5. Some write the last two, 7/7 ~ as you have here. Some are offering a complete Renga with all five lines. This 700-year-old form is finding new life here on FanStory and at a time when many are celebrating holidays it's bringing collaborative work together with a sense of fellowship.
Love the "f" alliteration in your last line. Excellent colors and presentation.
Great job!
All My Best,
Karenina
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Every entry in this Book of Renga has been stimulating. Some write the first three lines, in 5-7-5. Some write the last two, 7/7 ~ as you have here. Some are offering a complete Renga with all five lines. This 700-year-old form is finding new life here on FanStory and at a time when many are celebrating holidays it's bringing collaborative work together with a sense of fellowship.
Love the "f" alliteration in your last line. Excellent colors and presentation.
Great job!
All My Best,
Karenina
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Gloria.
Haven't seen you in a while. I haven't published much of my stuff here; just six times since I came back in late September. I've had some poetry published in a couple of large publisher anthologies and I've been focused on that. I always enjoy reading your application of the English language to poetry. Nicely written with a great image.
Robert
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Hello Gloria.
Haven't seen you in a while. I haven't published much of my stuff here; just six times since I came back in late September. I've had some poetry published in a couple of large publisher anthologies and I've been focused on that. I always enjoy reading your application of the English language to poetry. Nicely written with a great image.
Robert
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
Comment from royowen
Indeed, Gypsy has been helping a lot with the secrets and possibly the myths surrounding Japanese poetry and indeed, I don't know how non syllables turn into strict syllable anyway, well done Gloria, Blessings Roy
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Indeed, Gypsy has been helping a lot with the secrets and possibly the myths surrounding Japanese poetry and indeed, I don't know how non syllables turn into strict syllable anyway, well done Gloria, Blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That is lovely, gloria! That second line is just magical and a great continuation to this book. You've chosen a fabulous photo, too. Well done!! :)) Sandra xx
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That is lovely, gloria! That second line is just magical and a great continuation to this book. You've chosen a fabulous photo, too. Well done!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this renga poem with us. I enjoyed reading and you did a wonderful job describing this beautiful artwork with your poetry. Great job.
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Thank you for sharing this renga poem with us. I enjoyed reading and you did a wonderful job describing this beautiful artwork with your poetry. Great job.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2024