Supercalifragilisticexpalidocios
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Comment from DragonSkulls
Great little piece, author but it doesn't actually adhere to the rules. Each line of two words are supposed to stand on their own, not run into the next line. Like "I am...a friend...till the... very end." And it keeps going on from there just the same. Perhaps a reread of the rules and a reedit might help. I wish you the best of luck in the contest but as is, it isn't quite adhering to the rules. Let me know if you fix it and I'll upgrade the rating.
DS
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Great little piece, author but it doesn't actually adhere to the rules. Each line of two words are supposed to stand on their own, not run into the next line. Like "I am...a friend...till the... very end." And it keeps going on from there just the same. Perhaps a reread of the rules and a reedit might help. I wish you the best of luck in the contest but as is, it isn't quite adhering to the rules. Let me know if you fix it and I'll upgrade the rating.
DS
Comment Written 29-Nov-2024
Comment from Pam (respa)
You did a good job with the form and poem, as well as the topic. Effective imagery and rhyme.
Very good opening verses about feelings, dark and light, love and life. You also show the emotions are erratic, they love and they hurt; easy and work. A very good concluding verse referring back to the beginning. Good luck in the contest.
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You did a good job with the form and poem, as well as the topic. Effective imagery and rhyme.
Very good opening verses about feelings, dark and light, love and life. You also show the emotions are erratic, they love and they hurt; easy and work. A very good concluding verse referring back to the beginning. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is such a fun ride! The repetition of "supercalifragilisticexpialidocious" adds a almost joyful tone to the work.
The way you switch from deep feelings of being lost and found to more lighthearted moments was great. Like "they jive, they twerk"! Great job on making it all feel so real and relatable!
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Your poem is such a fun ride! The repetition of "supercalifragilisticexpialidocious" adds a almost joyful tone to the work.
The way you switch from deep feelings of being lost and found to more lighthearted moments was great. Like "they jive, they twerk"! Great job on making it all feel so real and relatable!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2024
