Fading Spotlight
Broken Harmony5 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem captures a powerful moment so well. I love how you share the passing of time with just a few words. The difference between "Bright light" and "Fading by fast" creates a striking image. And the one word closing - "Alone" is so emotional. It's short yet full of meaning - well done!
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Your poem captures a powerful moment so well. I love how you share the passing of time with just a few words. The difference between "Bright light" and "Fading by fast" creates a striking image. And the one word closing - "Alone" is so emotional. It's short yet full of meaning - well done!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A lonely offering for the contest here... I would suggest that instead of the comma which does not truly fit here, you replace it with the tilde as it signals the introduction of a similar/connected thought not the continuation of a sentence. Finally, you do not need a period at the end -- it is obviously the end of the poem and the poem is not a complete sentence. Love the emotionally cold, lonely vision your words deliver here! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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A lonely offering for the contest here... I would suggest that instead of the comma which does not truly fit here, you replace it with the tilde as it signals the introduction of a similar/connected thought not the continuation of a sentence. Finally, you do not need a period at the end -- it is obviously the end of the poem and the poem is not a complete sentence. Love the emotionally cold, lonely vision your words deliver here! ;) Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
Comment from shelley kaye
cool pic of glitter dust and paint
a cute 242 poem
one suggestion i have is to maybe center it and space the the word 'fading'?
bright light
f a d i n g by fast --
alone
just a thought for you to kick around ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
shelley :)
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cool pic of glitter dust and paint
a cute 242 poem
one suggestion i have is to maybe center it and space the the word 'fading'?
bright light
f a d i n g by fast --
alone
just a thought for you to kick around ;)
thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest!
shelley :)
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written 242 for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest and you have a lovely day and a very good weekend. Patricia.
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This is a very well written 242 for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest and you have a lovely day and a very good weekend. Patricia.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
Comment from shad blunt
Love the simplicity of words. To tell a story of emotions captured in three lines. Love the imagine that sets the poem up, and good luck for all to come.
Keep the words flowing, and I will keep reading. Shadrach
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Love the simplicity of words. To tell a story of emotions captured in three lines. Love the imagine that sets the poem up, and good luck for all to come.
Keep the words flowing, and I will keep reading. Shadrach
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024