Christmas in South Africa
spent on the beach, not in the snow4 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
Your poem is charming and it is more fun, in my opinion, to spend the winter in the sand, on the beach, than in the snow. But then that is just my humble opinion.
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Your poem is charming and it is more fun, in my opinion, to spend the winter in the sand, on the beach, than in the snow. But then that is just my humble opinion.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I love how you've made Christmas feel unique and fun. Your playful tone really shines through. That's especially trye when you talk about Santa melting in the heat! It's a fun poem that made me smile. Keep sharing these delightful ideas!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I love how you've made Christmas feel unique and fun. Your playful tone really shines through. That's especially trye when you talk about Santa melting in the heat! It's a fun poem that made me smile. Keep sharing these delightful ideas!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Thanks for a great review - glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Peter,
This is a nice Christmas poem. I like the way it rhymes throughout. I flows quite nicely from start to finish.
I found a couple small errors:
We could get the clone (Santta,) and whatever's required.-you have and extra t in (Santa) and I don't believe you need the comma.
We have graceful gemsbok, that we can (enrol.)-this one just needs another l (enroll)
Well done and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Peter,
This is a nice Christmas poem. I like the way it rhymes throughout. I flows quite nicely from start to finish.
I found a couple small errors:
We could get the clone (Santta,) and whatever's required.-you have and extra t in (Santa) and I don't believe you need the comma.
We have graceful gemsbok, that we can (enrol.)-this one just needs another l (enroll)
Well done and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Hi - thanks for the thoughtful review - glad you liked it. And thank you for the spots - not everyone would bother to point them out - appreciate it.
Enrol is spelt with only one "l" in English - 2 "l"s in American.
Santta is explained in the notes - he is a clone of Santa ! :)
Enjoy the holiday season, and thanks again.
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You're welcome. Shame on me I should have read the notes :)
Cecilia
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Peter
I liked this story of Christmas below the equator. I could see how you would miss the snow on Christmas. Though, even though I live in Minnesota we don't always have snow on Christmas. I would think that Santa could use some of the magic he uses to make the reindeer fly to keep them cool in the hot climes of the would.
I like the internal and end rhymes in this poem.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a nice day and Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Hi Peter
I liked this story of Christmas below the equator. I could see how you would miss the snow on Christmas. Though, even though I live in Minnesota we don't always have snow on Christmas. I would think that Santa could use some of the magic he uses to make the reindeer fly to keep them cool in the hot climes of the would.
I like the internal and end rhymes in this poem.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Good luck in the contest.
Have a nice day and Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Thanks for the nice review - glad you enjoyed it.
Great holiday season for you too - hope it snows ;)
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No problem, Peter. Thanks. I want snow for Christmas too.
Joan