The Freezer
a flash fiction story5 total reviews
Comment from Lana Marie
Just a bit creepy, I had to read it twice to realize that Abigail and her two kids were ghosts, ....I think, right? Nice creative writing for the contest.
Happy Thanksgiving Eve!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2024
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Just a bit creepy, I had to read it twice to realize that Abigail and her two kids were ghosts, ....I think, right? Nice creative writing for the contest.
Happy Thanksgiving Eve!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Lana. I had an idea of where to go with this that changed a couple times.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really enjoyed eerie atmosphere you created here. The strange blend of humor and horror is fascinating. haha I especially liked the scene with the turkey! It's so enjoyable to see how everything ties together in such an unexpected way! Keep up the great work! There's a lot of creativity here!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I really enjoyed eerie atmosphere you created here. The strange blend of humor and horror is fascinating. haha I especially liked the scene with the turkey! It's so enjoyable to see how everything ties together in such an unexpected way! Keep up the great work! There's a lot of creativity here!
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Michael
Comment from samandlancelot
Hi Mystery Writer,
You certainly wrote a Thanksgiving shocker. It looks like everyone is eligible to be this year's turkey. This would make for a good vegan story, which I almost thought you were setting up. I liked your dialect. Not too much to hold up the story but enough to add flavor to the characters, and I don't mean turkey seasoning.
Patricia
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Hi Mystery Writer,
You certainly wrote a Thanksgiving shocker. It looks like everyone is eligible to be this year's turkey. This would make for a good vegan story, which I almost thought you were setting up. I liked your dialect. Not too much to hold up the story but enough to add flavor to the characters, and I don't mean turkey seasoning.
Patricia
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Patricia
Comment from royowen
How interesting, I must admit it was tough getting my head around your story, it seems to have bounded from the courts of unreality onto the page, I just came from a similar story, the hellish biography of someone, well done, you got me going a bit, good job, blessings Roy
Typo : so, not to (woory) worry?
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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How interesting, I must admit it was tough getting my head around your story, it seems to have bounded from the courts of unreality onto the page, I just came from a similar story, the hellish biography of someone, well done, you got me going a bit, good job, blessings Roy
Typo : so, not to (woory) worry?
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Not a typo, Roy. It is a pronunciation.
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I didn't know that
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a very twisted story. I love it. I haven't quite determined if those people coming on the freezer are dead or not. I'm thinking they are.
Well done and good luck in your contest
Cecilia
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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This is a very twisted story. I love it. I haven't quite determined if those people coming on the freezer are dead or not. I'm thinking they are.
Well done and good luck in your contest
Cecilia
Comment Written 25-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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Thanks, Cecilia
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You're welcome
Cecilia