Screams of the Shadows
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Call"In the dark, the screams never stop.
3 total reviews
Comment from Begin Again
I think I got these chapters out of order but at least I wasn't too far ahead of the story. You're doing a great job with it and it most definitely holds the reader's attention. Good job!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I think I got these chapters out of order but at least I wasn't too far ahead of the story. You're doing a great job with it and it most definitely holds the reader's attention. Good job!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I'm always out of order some way, just glad I don't wake my living as an attorney or a criminal. I'm glad you are enjoying it tho, it's a little different from what I normally write
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I really felt the tension in this I could feel Sarah's unease with every moment. The little details, like the phone buzzing made everything feel so real and intense. I liked how you shared the fear Sarah felt without making it too obvious. I felt this creeping sense of dread. It pulled me in completely. The timer ticking down gave the whole scene an urgency that made me want to know what happens next! Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I really felt the tension in this I could feel Sarah's unease with every moment. The little details, like the phone buzzing made everything feel so real and intense. I liked how you shared the fear Sarah felt without making it too obvious. I felt this creeping sense of dread. It pulled me in completely. The timer ticking down gave the whole scene an urgency that made me want to know what happens next! Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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thank you, i really wait for your opinion, it's like you're my barometer telling which way the story is heading when I write something I still wish there was someway to get the 2nd scott and claire book
Comment from Julie Helms
You have a fantastic start to your novel! Your setting and descriptions are especially well done. You start at a point of intrigue and action that draws the reader in. I saw no grammatical errors.
You do have some computer gremlins at the following places. It's formatting that didn't transfer when you pasted it into the edit box (like ellipses or accents):
**The glowing screen pulled her back into the moment, her heart quickening. It wasn't a normal kind of fear, just the faint unease that came with unknown numbers. It could be nothing
**You will deliver it to 211 Oakridge Drive. If you're not there by midnight
**"Wait a second," Sarah interrupted, her voice trembling. "I don't know who you think you've got, but
Excellent job!
Julie
:-)
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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You have a fantastic start to your novel! Your setting and descriptions are especially well done. You start at a point of intrigue and action that draws the reader in. I saw no grammatical errors.
You do have some computer gremlins at the following places. It's formatting that didn't transfer when you pasted it into the edit box (like ellipses or accents):
**The glowing screen pulled her back into the moment, her heart quickening. It wasn't a normal kind of fear, just the faint unease that came with unknown numbers. It could be nothing
**You will deliver it to 211 Oakridge Drive. If you're not there by midnight
**"Wait a second," Sarah interrupted, her voice trembling. "I don't know who you think you've got, but
Excellent job!
Julie
:-)
** This reviewer has pledged to rate in accordance with site guidelines.**
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2024
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I hate those little gremlins, I try to catch the all but it's so easy to miss some but thanks for the rating