A Kidnapped Boy's Victory
Based on a true story about a boy being kidnapped.2 total reviews
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Ronny,'
I don't see how you classify this as a poem. You are rambling on about Nintendo characters. I see how you tried to use them. Your grammar is choppy at best. This story does not flow smoothly at all and your thoughts are all over the place. This is a short story at best.
Here is an example of some errors:
(With) caused-this should be (which)
will to keep -this sentence doesn't make sense.
Perhaps you can redo your "poem" as a short story instead.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Ronny,'
I don't see how you classify this as a poem. You are rambling on about Nintendo characters. I see how you tried to use them. Your grammar is choppy at best. This story does not flow smoothly at all and your thoughts are all over the place. This is a short story at best.
Here is an example of some errors:
(With) caused-this should be (which)
will to keep -this sentence doesn't make sense.
Perhaps you can redo your "poem" as a short story instead.
Cecilia
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2024
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Thanks for pointing out the errors that I didn't see. And yes, it does sound mostly like a short story now that I think about it. Thanks.
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Ronny,
You're welcome. That's what we do. Proof read each others work. I swear I proof read everything I post, but I'll be damned if somebody doesn't find an error.
Cecilia
Comment from patcelaw
The kid was very smart to be singing the songs that caused this guy to let him go enjoy your little poem very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing that you have a wonderful day and a very good weekend.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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The kid was very smart to be singing the songs that caused this guy to let him go enjoy your little poem very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing that you have a wonderful day and a very good weekend.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Really Really thank you. If you were old enough to be around in the 20th century and play these super mario brothers games for this game system that was called nintendo, you would really get the poem. Thank you though.