No Return
when you know there is not turning back3 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
You have a good time setting. Then you begin to sat down the plot. Which results in this final line:
Then a good killer" gives a reader cause to pause with that last line.
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You have a good time setting. Then you begin to sat down the plot. Which results in this final line:
Then a good killer" gives a reader cause to pause with that last line.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow... a very quick descent into darkness you've written here.... taking the reader's mind from contemplation to much deeper... well done for the competition - thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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Wow... a very quick descent into darkness you've written here.... taking the reader's mind from contemplation to much deeper... well done for the competition - thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, No Return, has the proper formatting and sems to be a sad nod to the occupation that has become the life someone lives all the time.
Note: You may want "than" rather than "then" in the third line.
Happy day.
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This 5-7-5, No Return, has the proper formatting and sems to be a sad nod to the occupation that has become the life someone lives all the time.
Note: You may want "than" rather than "then" in the third line.
Happy day.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024