June's Purple Lily
5-7-5 haiku28 total reviews
Comment from Colorado Owl
Your poem paints a beautiful picture. I enjoy the image of the flower turning towards the hummingbird. It's a win-win situation! Good choice of picture, too. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Your poem paints a beautiful picture. I enjoy the image of the flower turning towards the hummingbird. It's a win-win situation! Good choice of picture, too. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your kind comments today.
Comment from mermaids
Your words describe the beautiful lily as if it is a live character. I like how the flower is responding to the robin's song. Your poem creates a vivid scene of nature and takes the reader out into the natural world.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Your words describe the beautiful lily as if it is a live character. I like how the flower is responding to the robin's song. Your poem creates a vivid scene of nature and takes the reader out into the natural world.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your thoughtful review.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
What a beautiful 5-7-5 poem. You have captured the beauty of the purple lily. I was unaware that lilies come in purple. June is a great month for rebirth of nature.
Great job and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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What a beautiful 5-7-5 poem. You have captured the beauty of the purple lily. I was unaware that lilies come in purple. June is a great month for rebirth of nature.
Great job and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Cecilia, for such a nice review.
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You're welcome
Cecilia
Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully worded 575 and it is also presented very lovely. I enjoyed very much not only listening to it but also viewing it. May you have a wonderful evening and a nice weekend. Patricia.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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This is a beautifully worded 575 and it is also presented very lovely. I enjoyed very much not only listening to it but also viewing it. May you have a wonderful evening and a nice weekend. Patricia.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Shanbreen
Beautifully written haiku. The visual is perfect and I love the the rendition of the purple lily facing forward to hear the robin's song. Best for the contest and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Beautifully written haiku. The visual is perfect and I love the the rendition of the purple lily facing forward to hear the robin's song. Best for the contest and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your super nice review.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
What a wonderful combination of natural beauty and personification in such a limited short form -- well done, my lady! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing this one today and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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What a wonderful combination of natural beauty and personification in such a limited short form -- well done, my lady! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing this one today and best of luck in the contest! ;) Yvette
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thank you for such a positive review.
Comment from TPAC
A creative formed conveyance, delivering a smooth view inwhich it's reader can consider: just enough in my viewpoint to entice their minds. Great conception in my given viewpoint.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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A creative formed conveyance, delivering a smooth view inwhich it's reader can consider: just enough in my viewpoint to entice their minds. Great conception in my given viewpoint.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your nicely concise review.
Comment from ESOSTINE
The art work is very beautiful, brightens the readers face. I love the rich imagery in the poem and the personification of the lily. Well penned, dear. Thanks for sharing your creativity. Best regards.
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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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The art work is very beautiful, brightens the readers face. I love the rich imagery in the poem and the personification of the lily. Well penned, dear. Thanks for sharing your creativity. Best regards.
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Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thank you for stopping by to review today.
Comment from judiverse
That is lovely artwork. There are some great artists on FanArtReview, including avmurray. Great imagery of the hopeful lily turning to hear the robin. I think I'd prefer "sing" to "song" in the last line. Maybe robin's song. Something to consider. Beautiful presentation, and good luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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That is lovely artwork. There are some great artists on FanArtReview, including avmurray. Great imagery of the hopeful lily turning to hear the robin. I think I'd prefer "sing" to "song" in the last line. Maybe robin's song. Something to consider. Beautiful presentation, and good luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your great review and suggestions.
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You're very welcome. I see you went with robin's song. I like that. judi
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You're very welcome. I see you went with robin's song. I like that. judi
Comment from Dawn Munro
How lovely! This 5-7-5 poem evokes such beautiful imagery --a gorgeous lily, the song of a robin... But even more, your use of the month's name (June) aids the reader's imagination = warm sunshine and brezes!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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How lovely! This 5-7-5 poem evokes such beautiful imagery --a gorgeous lily, the song of a robin... But even more, your use of the month's name (June) aids the reader's imagination = warm sunshine and brezes!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review!
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Oops -- lol! breEzes. You're very welcome. (This left hand numbness is tripping me up!)