Hummingbirds
Watching the hummingbirds and their antics33 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Oh I love hummingbirds and I miss them so much during the cold months. In the summer we have 6 birdfeeds up outside of our sunroom and we watch them all day. Your poem is lovely and describes their anctics perfectly. thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Oh I love hummingbirds and I miss them so much during the cold months. In the summer we have 6 birdfeeds up outside of our sunroom and we watch them all day. Your poem is lovely and describes their anctics perfectly. thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Marilyn,
Thank you for your kind review. I love hummingbirds they are so tiny and delicate. Do you make your own food?
Cecilia
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Yes we do. We go through the sugar in the summer lol
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Yes ma'am I do also. It's good for them and I wish the manufacturer would get rid of that red dye. It's killing them
Cecilia
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Hummingbirds are such fun! Ours, unfortunately, have flown for the winter.. :( Your poem is full of wonderful observations and your use of active and passive descriptors is really good, but it seems to struggle for a rhythm for the reader to settle into and enjoy.... Perhaps finds a general rhyme scheme (abab, abcb, aabb, etc) or syllabic tune (8686, 8785, many more!!) to generally follow to help the reader 'rhythmically enjoy' your descriptors instead of simply reading them... Even a free verse can have a rhythmic feel to it... They are certainly the perfect choice for a lively poem and you really have a wonderful grasp of putting that to writing! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing, my lady!! ;)
For example (abab, 8686):
Dancing and diving in the sky
Darting, floating around
Oh, those little hummingbirds fly
Up out of sight then down
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Hummingbirds are such fun! Ours, unfortunately, have flown for the winter.. :( Your poem is full of wonderful observations and your use of active and passive descriptors is really good, but it seems to struggle for a rhythm for the reader to settle into and enjoy.... Perhaps finds a general rhyme scheme (abab, abcb, aabb, etc) or syllabic tune (8686, 8785, many more!!) to generally follow to help the reader 'rhythmically enjoy' your descriptors instead of simply reading them... Even a free verse can have a rhythmic feel to it... They are certainly the perfect choice for a lively poem and you really have a wonderful grasp of putting that to writing! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing, my lady!! ;)
For example (abab, 8686):
Dancing and diving in the sky
Darting, floating around
Oh, those little hummingbirds fly
Up out of sight then down
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Y.M.,
Thank you for the kind review. I will look it over and see what I can do about getting some rhyme in there. I struggle hard with that. Thank you for advice. I appreciate you.
Cecilia
Comment from Natureschild
I really enjoyed reading your portrayal of these wonderful little birds. The imagery is vivid; my favourite line, 'The glittering leaves', immediately makes me think of the irridence of their plumage. - Terry
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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I really enjoyed reading your portrayal of these wonderful little birds. The imagery is vivid; my favourite line, 'The glittering leaves', immediately makes me think of the irridence of their plumage. - Terry
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much for the kind review. The hummingbirds are a joy to watch. One of my favorite birds.
Cecilia
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Mine too:)
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Mine too:)
Comment from Aussie
I am a huge nature lover too. Off course our birds in Oz are very different to America. It's a joy to watch them come and you put out so many feeders. Let me tell you an amazing occurrence: I walk my dog daily beside my power wheelchair. There had been a mighty storm the night before. I sighted a Magpie sitting on a fence. I have never been attacked by them, guessing they know I mean no harm. As we got closer, I expected him to take flight. He was five feet away and he stayed and I spoke to him quietly. He looked at me and he listened. I have never been so close to a wild bird. After 10 minutes he was still listening. What a joy! Thanks for sharing. K xx
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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I am a huge nature lover too. Off course our birds in Oz are very different to America. It's a joy to watch them come and you put out so many feeders. Let me tell you an amazing occurrence: I walk my dog daily beside my power wheelchair. There had been a mighty storm the night before. I sighted a Magpie sitting on a fence. I have never been attacked by them, guessing they know I mean no harm. As we got closer, I expected him to take flight. He was five feet away and he stayed and I spoke to him quietly. He looked at me and he listened. I have never been so close to a wild bird. After 10 minutes he was still listening. What a joy! Thanks for sharing. K xx
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. That is amazing that you talked to the magpie and it just sat there for so longs. If you have patience a hummingbird will land on your finger for a few seconds. It's pretty awesome.
Cecilia
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How wonderful is our God. K xx
Comment from Shanbreen
I love all the wonderful life that makes nature, but I have never given the little creatures much thought. When I lived in Tampa, two hummingbirds came and drank honey water from the feeder. It made me wonder how compact these little birds were. Your poem is well written. It makes me appreciate these tiny creatures. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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I love all the wonderful life that makes nature, but I have never given the little creatures much thought. When I lived in Tampa, two hummingbirds came and drank honey water from the feeder. It made me wonder how compact these little birds were. Your poem is well written. It makes me appreciate these tiny creatures. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Shanbreen,
Thank you for your kind review. They are wonderful little birds.
Cecilia
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, I think the hummingbird is one of nature's gifts to us, like jewels she shares, and they are quite the marvel scientifically too! Your poem captures this fact beautifully, and evokes much lovely imagery.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Oh, I think the hummingbird is one of nature's gifts to us, like jewels she shares, and they are quite the marvel scientifically too! Your poem captures this fact beautifully, and evokes much lovely imagery.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Cecilia
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It was my pleasure. :)
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:)
Cecilia
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written six star poem about the little humming birds and how they fly back and forth. I didn't know to put out a feeder this time of the year. I will do that. I so love the little birds and love watching them. God is so amazing at all His little creations. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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This is a very well written six star poem about the little humming birds and how they fly back and forth. I didn't know to put out a feeder this time of the year. I will do that. I so love the little birds and love watching them. God is so amazing at all His little creations. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Teri,
Thank you for your kind review. Depending on were you live in the country you might not want to do that. I take my last feeder down in mid October. Two weeks after I see the last one in case they are stragglers. I make my own sugar water too. I don't know why the manufacturers like to put that red die in there.
Cecilia
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We live in West Tennessee. Is it better I wait til next year?
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Yes, they are already in South America for the winter. They say you can put them up as early as March, however I don' t put any out until April when I start seeing them show up. If it's too cold I know they aren't back yet.
Cecilia
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Thank you so much for letting me know!
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You're welcome.
Cecilia
Comment from nomi338
Your eloquent descriptive words painted a picture so clear that I did not even have to close my eyes to see them. You have a very good way of using descriptive devices to paint beautiful pictures, Congratulations.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Your eloquent descriptive words painted a picture so clear that I did not even have to close my eyes to see them. You have a very good way of using descriptive devices to paint beautiful pictures, Congratulations.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Nomi,
Thank you for the kind review.
Cecilia
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Hi Cecilia,
I don't believe I've reviewed you before; I write mostly prose, and read little poetry. But I love your sort of "ode" to the hummingbird. They are beautiful, delicate little birds, and I'm always thrilled when one stops by my front porch while I'm out in the afternoons.
And I didn't know a group was a glittering. Huh!
Thanks for sharing your poetry with us.
My only critique is that you used "flitting" twice in the poem; as it is an uncommon word, it stands out. "darting" or "zipping" perhaps?
Next to the last line you show humming birds as two words instead of one.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Hi Cecilia,
I don't believe I've reviewed you before; I write mostly prose, and read little poetry. But I love your sort of "ode" to the hummingbird. They are beautiful, delicate little birds, and I'm always thrilled when one stops by my front porch while I'm out in the afternoons.
And I didn't know a group was a glittering. Huh!
Thanks for sharing your poetry with us.
My only critique is that you used "flitting" twice in the poem; as it is an uncommon word, it stands out. "darting" or "zipping" perhaps?
Next to the last line you show humming birds as two words instead of one.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I will take your advice and change one of them.
Cecilia
Comment from Sally Law
Just beautiful, Cecilia! I miss them as my eyesight doesn't catch moving objects anymore. The hummingbird is vivid in my memory though. They seem to fly suspended in the air. They are amazing little birds. How blessed you are to have a glittering in your view! Thank you for sharing. A real treat!
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal :)) Xos
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Just beautiful, Cecilia! I miss them as my eyesight doesn't catch moving objects anymore. The hummingbird is vivid in my memory though. They seem to fly suspended in the air. They are amazing little birds. How blessed you are to have a glittering in your view! Thank you for sharing. A real treat!
Sending you my best today as always.
Sal :)) Xos
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Sal,
Thank you for the kind review. Yes the glittering was a once in a lifetime event. I only had about 10 birds this fall.
Cecilia