The Humble Night Calls Again
The precious summer memories of a young man.10 total reviews
Comment from Trina Layne
Great reflections. I feel like just about every word is precisely what you need it to be. The imagery in the twilight description is lovely to read. There might have been some sentences that weren't quite complete (from a grammatical standpoint). I'm not a Grammar Nazi. When I am unsure, I consult my English major friends. Or, I find a useful app. That ending line is dynamic - The humble night calls again.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Great reflections. I feel like just about every word is precisely what you need it to be. The imagery in the twilight description is lovely to read. There might have been some sentences that weren't quite complete (from a grammatical standpoint). I'm not a Grammar Nazi. When I am unsure, I consult my English major friends. Or, I find a useful app. That ending line is dynamic - The humble night calls again.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Hi, Trina. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from lyenochka
A lovely piece and we all need such good young men today. Such a thoughtful youth to look after his grandparents. May our young people have many wholesome ways to have fun and a bright future!
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He mowed his grandparent's lawn (grandparents') if more than one
I was curious as to why you capitalized Robin and Bass.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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A lovely piece and we all need such good young men today. Such a thoughtful youth to look after his grandparents. May our young people have many wholesome ways to have fun and a bright future!
Comments:
He mowed his grandparent's lawn (grandparents') if more than one
I was curious as to why you capitalized Robin and Bass.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2024
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Gayla putnam
Your tale brought precious memories of summers past and youth flown. It was a delightful trip down memory lane. I loved the line "girls stroll down the road talking about boys they've kissed this summer. Sadly, none of them was him. gayla
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Your tale brought precious memories of summers past and youth flown. It was a delightful trip down memory lane. I loved the line "girls stroll down the road talking about boys they've kissed this summer. Sadly, none of them was him. gayla
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Hi, Gayla. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from estory
Your writing is full of color, texture and sound here. You paint this wonderful, pastoral scene of a summer evening, and in the lengthening shadows, all the memories of the past summer seem to waver in those shadows as the boy on the porch recalls them. There's moments of joy, discovery, adventure and disappointment. It is very much a little slice of life. And there is poignancy to it, this sense that it is a moment on the verge of slipping away. estory
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Your writing is full of color, texture and sound here. You paint this wonderful, pastoral scene of a summer evening, and in the lengthening shadows, all the memories of the past summer seem to waver in those shadows as the boy on the porch recalls them. There's moments of joy, discovery, adventure and disappointment. It is very much a little slice of life. And there is poignancy to it, this sense that it is a moment on the verge of slipping away. estory
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2024
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words and support. It's deeply appreciated! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was outstanding. I swear I could smell the grass, hear the mockingbird, and see the shadows of twilight taking over as the sun made it's exit. Then you went and wove a sweet little moment of a young man's life into it. Beautifully written. Gretchen
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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This was outstanding. I swear I could smell the grass, hear the mockingbird, and see the shadows of twilight taking over as the sun made it's exit. Then you went and wove a sweet little moment of a young man's life into it. Beautifully written. Gretchen
Comment Written 05-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Hi, Gretchen. Thank you for your kind words and shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Teri7
Mike, This is a very well written flash fiction about a young man remembering about a summer night and what he felt then. Great descriptive words. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Mike, This is a very well written flash fiction about a young man remembering about a summer night and what he felt then. Great descriptive words. Thanks for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Hi, Teri. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Nicki.B
Gorgeous I really loved this. It's written beautifully so melodic, with beautiful scenes and emotions throughout, it's just such a lovely story I was so disappointed when I came to rate it and I had run out of 6 stars as this piece cruelly deserves it. Well done, thanks so much for sharing
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Gorgeous I really loved this. It's written beautifully so melodic, with beautiful scenes and emotions throughout, it's just such a lovely story I was so disappointed when I came to rate it and I had run out of 6 stars as this piece cruelly deserves it. Well done, thanks so much for sharing
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Hi, Nicki. Thank you for your kind words and thoughts of a six. It's deeply appreciated! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from BethShelby
This is beautifully written. I like all the descriptive word s you use to make us feel we're right there with you experiencing it all. What memories we could all recall for summers past.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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This is beautifully written. I like all the descriptive word s you use to make us feel we're right there with you experiencing it all. What memories we could all recall for summers past.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, how much simpler and even 'down to earth' life was back then, right? Love the feeling of mowing and seeing the results of the job and then enjoying what else the world had to offer (without a phone or computer!!). Thanx so much for sharing! ;)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Oh, how much simpler and even 'down to earth' life was back then, right? Love the feeling of mowing and seeing the results of the job and then enjoying what else the world had to offer (without a phone or computer!!). Thanx so much for sharing! ;)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Hello, my friend. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from royowen
The thing about memories, some are so wonderful, one can't deny them, they are a gift to us who dwell among the bowers of creation, that are such wonderful memories and occurrences thst probably are an accident, beautifully written My friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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The thing about memories, some are so wonderful, one can't deny them, they are a gift to us who dwell among the bowers of creation, that are such wonderful memories and occurrences thst probably are an accident, beautifully written My friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024
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Hi, Roy, Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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