The Middle
A sonnet on enlightenment.4 total reviews
Comment from Sarah Probe S.
« Each moment new and keep myself steady.
No time elapsing and hold my heart true «
I like those verses here, very nice, your Shakespearien style Sonnet is truly amazing work,
Best wishes,
Sarah
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« Each moment new and keep myself steady.
No time elapsing and hold my heart true «
I like those verses here, very nice, your Shakespearien style Sonnet is truly amazing work,
Best wishes,
Sarah
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
Comment from CM Pickard
What and evocative opening with "Caged in the thoughts supposed to release her". This poem has a beautiful reflective tone that draws the reader in. However it does seem to stray in a few places from iambic pentameter if that is a condition of the contest (i.e. 1,3,4 & 7). Would suggest a quick re-read and double check the flow and iambic pentameter side of things.
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What and evocative opening with "Caged in the thoughts supposed to release her". This poem has a beautiful reflective tone that draws the reader in. However it does seem to stray in a few places from iambic pentameter if that is a condition of the contest (i.e. 1,3,4 & 7). Would suggest a quick re-read and double check the flow and iambic pentameter side of things.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This sonnet, Servant to Her Heart, has the poetic take on the struggle to escape and be free of the shackles of oppression. ONE BIG PROBLEM: You are missing a stanza. This has only ten lines; needs four more. You have until January to add them. Good luck.
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This sonnet, Servant to Her Heart, has the poetic take on the struggle to escape and be free of the shackles of oppression. ONE BIG PROBLEM: You are missing a stanza. This has only ten lines; needs four more. You have until January to add them. Good luck.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2024
Comment from lancellot
This is very nice and I like the theme but... This falls short of a proper sonnet.
It must consist of 14 lines. You have only 10. You are missing an entire stanza. Also, remember the question.
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This is very nice and I like the theme but... This falls short of a proper sonnet.
It must consist of 14 lines. You have only 10. You are missing an entire stanza. Also, remember the question.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2024