Miracles
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Comment from Liz O'Neill
I love the bantering that goes on here. Experience that round I like the use of personification:"Rebecca hesitated, glaring at the loose shutters, shattered glass, and tangle. Nice use of simile:"It was as if the house had been frozen in time, waiting for someone to return." a great ending
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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I love the bantering that goes on here. Experience that round I like the use of personification:"Rebecca hesitated, glaring at the loose shutters, shattered glass, and tangle. Nice use of simile:"It was as if the house had been frozen in time, waiting for someone to return." a great ending
Comment Written 24-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2024
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Thanks for reading another chapter and leaving your thoughts. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
Can I borrow a ghost to tidy up my apartment? Now that's the way to be surprised by a dilapidated exterior!
I think, maybe....Alyssa? Allie? Oh, geez! Garth was enamored with Rebecca.
That's a great plot twist!
Poor Matthew-- they need to find him fast!
I might have seen one edit:
"Not a first, but as our journey progressed,"
(at?)
Big deal huh?
LOL-- Nobody pays me big bucks for proofreading for a reason!
I'm behind (again)--
No worries!
It's great, and I will catch up!
Karenina
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Can I borrow a ghost to tidy up my apartment? Now that's the way to be surprised by a dilapidated exterior!
I think, maybe....Alyssa? Allie? Oh, geez! Garth was enamored with Rebecca.
That's a great plot twist!
Poor Matthew-- they need to find him fast!
I might have seen one edit:
"Not a first, but as our journey progressed,"
(at?)
Big deal huh?
LOL-- Nobody pays me big bucks for proofreading for a reason!
I'm behind (again)--
No worries!
It's great, and I will catch up!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Good catch! i almost didn't find it to correct but it is done. Heck, if I hurry a little faster I just might get started on another chapter....I've got to get my self in gear.
Smiles, Carol
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I want to know what vitamins you're taking!
:)
Comment from Julie Helms
Everything's coming to a head and the pieces are fitting together!
Some edits:
No one questioned his story; no one asked me why I would kill the man I'd just married."
(Quote mark missing before No.)
"Can't you imagine snuggled up with a warm blanket on a cold night, warming your toes in front of the fire, Rebecca?"
(...imagine being snuggled up...or...imagine snuggling up)
there's a body inside. They haven't identified yet."
(....identified *it* yet.)
Danni and Jenna screamed, both clinging to each other.
(Both is redundant with each other. ...screamed, clinging to each other.)
You got hanged right in this one!
Julie
:-)
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Everything's coming to a head and the pieces are fitting together!
Some edits:
No one questioned his story; no one asked me why I would kill the man I'd just married."
(Quote mark missing before No.)
"Can't you imagine snuggled up with a warm blanket on a cold night, warming your toes in front of the fire, Rebecca?"
(...imagine being snuggled up...or...imagine snuggling up)
there's a body inside. They haven't identified yet."
(....identified *it* yet.)
Danni and Jenna screamed, both clinging to each other.
(Both is redundant with each other. ...screamed, clinging to each other.)
You got hanged right in this one!
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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I have to tell you that you are a better proofreader than my actual publisher. I had to tell them two or three times when they changed vices to voices and several others. Now, I just got my book, and on two pages, they have lines highlighted with (Author 1) behind them. Crazy!
Thanks for your help. It's fixed.
Smiles, Carol
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That's frustrating. I had to go through 4 proof copies before I finally got a good version. My problem was with the guy I paid to upload it kept messing up the formatting or font size etc.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Another dramatic and ghostly chapter. I love that Miriam has kept the house inside in tiptop condition and now the photo, another mystery for the ladies to solve.
You are weaving quite the intriguing story, Carol.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Another dramatic and ghostly chapter. I love that Miriam has kept the house inside in tiptop condition and now the photo, another mystery for the ladies to solve.
You are weaving quite the intriguing story, Carol.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2024
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Thank you for enjoying my efforts and for leaving such great reviews and comments. I so appreciate it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is an interesting chapter that just adds more questions to the story. We know the body isn't Matthew, but will everyone suspect he killed the man in his car as Doyle hopes? And what does Eleanor know about the woman in the picture?
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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This is an interesting chapter that just adds more questions to the story. We know the body isn't Matthew, but will everyone suspect he killed the man in his car as Doyle hopes? And what does Eleanor know about the woman in the picture?
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Excuse the cut and paste...
I'm traveling to North Carolina to spend some time with my Great Granddaughters (and enjoy Keyanna's national soccer tournament). It's like a whirlwind at the moment, but I do appreciate your time and especially your enjoyment of my story. Hope to get back to it soon. Thank you as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
You have a brilliant way with drama, you're one of the few authors that can keep the interest flowing, although you ate an incurable romantic, you have that flair for the drama that life can throw up dear Carol, you deserve lots of sixes. But I can't give you them, because I only get a few, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : Not a(t) first.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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You have a brilliant way with drama, you're one of the few authors that can keep the interest flowing, although you ate an incurable romantic, you have that flair for the drama that life can throw up dear Carol, you deserve lots of sixes. But I can't give you them, because I only get a few, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : Not a(t) first.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Excuse the cut and paste...
I'm traveling to North Carolina to spend some time with my Great Granddaughters (and enjoy Keyanna's national soccer tournament). It's like a whirlwind at the moment, but I do appreciate your time and especially your enjoyment of my story. Hope to get back to it soon. Thank you as always.
Smiles, Carol
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My granddaughter's national competitions are on in late November. too here in Brisbane 2000 kms away. Well done,
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, I just never know what you'll come up with next. But you're the queen of conflict as far as I'm concerned. Weaving the living with the dead. :-) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Wow, I just never know what you'll come up with next. But you're the queen of conflict as far as I'm concerned. Weaving the living with the dead. :-) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Excuse the cut and paste...
I'm traveling to North Carolina to spend some time with my Great Granddaughters (and enjoy Keyanna's national soccer tournament). It's like a whirlwind at the moment, but I do appreciate your time and especially your enjoyment of my story. Hope to get back to it soon. Thank you as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Jacob1395
You always know how to leave your chapters on a cliffhanger, Carol. I thought that was a real heart to heart conversation between Miriam and Eleanor and I could really feel their emotions coming through. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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You always know how to leave your chapters on a cliffhanger, Carol. I thought that was a real heart to heart conversation between Miriam and Eleanor and I could really feel their emotions coming through. I can't wait to read the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Forgive me for my short thank you but I am so far behind and hope to clear the slate before I leave tomorrow morning. Between the book being published and packing and writing, I'm going crazy. Thank you as always, Smiles, Carol
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Will your book be available on Amazon, Carol?
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It is there right now, Jacob. I got notified at 6:57 AM and bought the first book at 7AM. I could have bought an author copy but I wanted the first one off the press. LOL
Comment from Tim Margetts
I saw your notification about this going online when I got home last night but it was too late to read.
It was worth the wait.
The inheritance makes sense now, as a living relative, and the only one, the earlier clause would come into effect despite the adoption.
Now they just need to find the secret room where she is hiding Matthew.
Tim x
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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I saw your notification about this going online when I got home last night but it was too late to read.
It was worth the wait.
The inheritance makes sense now, as a living relative, and the only one, the earlier clause would come into effect despite the adoption.
Now they just need to find the secret room where she is hiding Matthew.
Tim x
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Forgive me for my short thank you but I am so far behind and hope to clear the slate before I leave tomorrow morning. Between the book being published and packing and writing, I'm going crazy. Thank you as always, Smiles, Carol
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Have a great trip... off anywhere nice?
See you when you get back
Tim x
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North Carolina to be with my great granddaughters and granddaughter...I will try to write while they are in school.
Thanks!
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Is this a permanent move then or a holiday visit,
Whichever it is, have a damn good time
Tim x
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Another informative and action-packed chapter, Carol. The story of Trevor and Miriam is heartbreaking. But the not-so-abandoned mansion holds many surprises, I'm betting.
You're making great progress with your book. Will it be done at the end of the month for the contest?
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Another informative and action-packed chapter, Carol. The story of Trevor and Miriam is heartbreaking. But the not-so-abandoned mansion holds many surprises, I'm betting.
You're making great progress with your book. Will it be done at the end of the month for the contest?
xo
Pam
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Forgive me for my short thank you but I am so far behind and hope to clear the slate before I leave tomorrow morning. Between the book being published and packing and writing, I'm going crazy. Thank you as always, Smiles, Carol