Take Steps
A 2-4-2 contest entry7 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I think this is quite profound, Katie. Change is inevitable but we don't need to dive in head-first. Baby steps, not great "leaps or bounds." I find this mesmerising and thought-provoking. As ever, a strong contender. Good luck! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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I think this is quite profound, Katie. Change is inevitable but we don't need to dive in head-first. Baby steps, not great "leaps or bounds." I find this mesmerising and thought-provoking. As ever, a strong contender. Good luck! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 13-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much Debbie!
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Katiemae,
This is a poem full of wisdom and a profound message for doing something so simple: take things slowly, take small steps.
I love the last line -- to me it means, time is not a constant. Change can be a good thing. (Though at 67, I find it difficult ti accept change).
Excellent message using only 8 syllables!
Good luck and best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Katiemae,
This is a poem full of wisdom and a profound message for doing something so simple: take things slowly, take small steps.
I love the last line -- to me it means, time is not a constant. Change can be a good thing. (Though at 67, I find it difficult ti accept change).
Excellent message using only 8 syllables!
Good luck and best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 13-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much for your comments and review Cindy!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from karenina
Wise! I have had times in my life that I could not seem to begin a journey I desperately needed to go on -- be it educational, relational, or spiritual--because the "leap" seemed perilous.
The Chinese proverb: "A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step" is foresight I've needed to embrace.
Good job delivering an impactful message in a 2-4-2 form!
Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Wise! I have had times in my life that I could not seem to begin a journey I desperately needed to go on -- be it educational, relational, or spiritual--because the "leap" seemed perilous.
The Chinese proverb: "A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step" is foresight I've needed to embrace.
Good job delivering an impactful message in a 2-4-2 form!
Karenina
Comment Written 13-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much karenina for your comments and review. It's much appreciated!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
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You're welcome!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very nice 2-4-2 contest entry you have penned. The artwork goes well with your words. It is amazing that you can come up with such great work from your phone. Best wishes in the contest! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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This is a very nice 2-4-2 contest entry you have penned. The artwork goes well with your words. It is amazing that you can come up with such great work from your phone. Best wishes in the contest! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 13-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much Teri for reviewing!
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
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You are so welcome! love and blessings always! Teri
Comment from Mark D. R.
Katie,
Never a real fan of capitalization or punctuation, especially, in short poems.
So for my editorial suggestion for this entry:
take steps,
not leaps or bounds --
times change
I do like the idea for your poem!
Mark
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Katie,
Never a real fan of capitalization or punctuation, especially, in short poems.
So for my editorial suggestion for this entry:
take steps,
not leaps or bounds --
times change
I do like the idea for your poem!
Mark
Comment Written 13-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Thanks so very much Mark. This is not a haiku so I think caps are OK. This is a 2-4-2. I'll look it up though.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment from royowen
An excellent 2/4/2, the only problem is that there are three syllables in the last line.KatieMae I suggest that you take out towards and insert TIMES, well done Dear friend, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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An excellent 2/4/2, the only problem is that there are three syllables in the last line.KatieMae I suggest that you take out towards and insert TIMES, well done Dear friend, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Thank you Roy. That's not the first time I've gotten into trouble over the word "towards" it sounds like one syllable to me. I took your suggestion so thank you.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
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It would be, certainly I'm my country KatieMae
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
You might want to rework this one.
You have 3 syllables in your last line. The count refers to syllables rather than word count.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Hi there,
You might want to rework this one.
You have 3 syllables in your last line. The count refers to syllables rather than word count.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 13-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2024
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Thanks for your review. That's not the first time I've gotten into trouble over the word towards. It sounds like one syllable to me. I changed it.
Thanks again
Katiemae1977