Delightful Drizzle
A Poem5 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is a great philosophy to adhere to when times get tough. I noticed one mistake: you wrote 'the' "twice" before the part about the smoke and mirrors. Otherwise, I loved every part of this poem. The rhymes the flow and the meter are all top-notch. Well done and keep up the good work.
Jesse
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This is a great philosophy to adhere to when times get tough. I noticed one mistake: you wrote 'the' "twice" before the part about the smoke and mirrors. Otherwise, I loved every part of this poem. The rhymes the flow and the meter are all top-notch. Well done and keep up the good work.
Jesse
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Delightful Drizzle, must be hitting me at this early hour as something well-written, but hovering just above an erotic tale of a "lone gunman".
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This poem, Delightful Drizzle, must be hitting me at this early hour as something well-written, but hovering just above an erotic tale of a "lone gunman".
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Jay,
This in a great poem. I like how it flows to completion of the story. I also like how you took the poem from you or your character from being a "prick" to someone who has humbled themselves. It's a very creative poem an I like it.
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Jay,
This in a great poem. I like how it flows to completion of the story. I also like how you took the poem from you or your character from being a "prick" to someone who has humbled themselves. It's a very creative poem an I like it.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This has such a great energy to it! The line "spidey sense starts tingling from the tangled web I've woven" really stood out to me! It's such a sharpway to express the feeling of being caught. Your sense of confidence and drive shines through. This was a fun read with a lot of personality! Great job!
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This has such a great energy to it! The line "spidey sense starts tingling from the tangled web I've woven" really stood out to me! It's such a sharpway to express the feeling of being caught. Your sense of confidence and drive shines through. This was a fun read with a lot of personality! Great job!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A self-searching free verse that talks of indecision but ultimate dedication to a cause... the cause of self that can never be abandoned. Thanx for sharing this evening! ;)
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A self-searching free verse that talks of indecision but ultimate dedication to a cause... the cause of self that can never be abandoned. Thanx for sharing this evening! ;)
Comment Written 08-Nov-2024