A Fox's Time
The concept of time11 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
As a farmer and raise chickens, your poem got me inside a foxes' mind. I have more problem with Coyotes but I'm sure what ever thought processes these animals have is the same.
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As a farmer and raise chickens, your poem got me inside a foxes' mind. I have more problem with Coyotes but I'm sure what ever thought processes these animals have is the same.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
Comment from LJbutterfly
As children observe and sit and think about things they see in the world, they often draw unscientific but accurate conclusions. Your well rhymed and metered poem demonstrates your thorough observations.
Humans experience more activities and responsibilities in a day, and require a clock as a gage to let them know when time is running out. Your poem leaves the reader pondering.
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As children observe and sit and think about things they see in the world, they often draw unscientific but accurate conclusions. Your well rhymed and metered poem demonstrates your thorough observations.
Humans experience more activities and responsibilities in a day, and require a clock as a gage to let them know when time is running out. Your poem leaves the reader pondering.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
Comment from zanya
This poem is such an enjoyable read - about time through the lens of the animals versus the human perspective - the language is so effective and a great pic to illustrate
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This poem is such an enjoyable read - about time through the lens of the animals versus the human perspective - the language is so effective and a great pic to illustrate
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
Comment from karenina
Wow. You've demonstrated a mastery of rhyme and meter that is head and shoulders above most.
This concept of time is a chain we humans hang around our necks.
It imprisons us to the incessant need to go faster or slower ~ lest we miss something.
How freeing it must be for animals to rely upon nature to mark their journey from day to night and back to dawn!
Karenina
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Wow. You've demonstrated a mastery of rhyme and meter that is head and shoulders above most.
This concept of time is a chain we humans hang around our necks.
It imprisons us to the incessant need to go faster or slower ~ lest we miss something.
How freeing it must be for animals to rely upon nature to mark their journey from day to night and back to dawn!
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
Comment from bob cullen
You here are talking about the enemy. As a child, more than six decades ago, we had a poultry farm. Chooks and chickens were my parent's livelihoods, and foxes were the feared nighttime raiders. There were many battles between my dad armed with a Neighbour's shotgun and the wily foxes. Dad was about as accurate with the shotgun as I was as a bowler in cricket. Targets were pretty safe in both situations. My memory may be slightly tainted as I tend to base many of my childhood tales on tales told by my truth-distorting father. He also won World War Two for the Allies.
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You here are talking about the enemy. As a child, more than six decades ago, we had a poultry farm. Chooks and chickens were my parent's livelihoods, and foxes were the feared nighttime raiders. There were many battles between my dad armed with a Neighbour's shotgun and the wily foxes. Dad was about as accurate with the shotgun as I was as a bowler in cricket. Targets were pretty safe in both situations. My memory may be slightly tainted as I tend to base many of my childhood tales on tales told by my truth-distorting father. He also won World War Two for the Allies.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
Comment from Nicki.B
This poem is excellent Pam. It reads wth lovely fluency and rhyme ans I love how you thought about it when you were younger.
Foxes have come around our place at times when our neighbour had chickens and my partner he works an early shift must Sunday mornings and at that time almost every week the fox would lurk around outside to figure out ways to get to them, I was thinking they must have great timing lol! Beautiful poem with and interesting read.
Best Wishes
Nicki x
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This poem is excellent Pam. It reads wth lovely fluency and rhyme ans I love how you thought about it when you were younger.
Foxes have come around our place at times when our neighbour had chickens and my partner he works an early shift must Sunday mornings and at that time almost every week the fox would lurk around outside to figure out ways to get to them, I was thinking they must have great timing lol! Beautiful poem with and interesting read.
Best Wishes
Nicki x
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
Comment from Barry Penfold
Lovely rhyming poem. I like your concept. Man follows time and animal follow senses. Thanks for sharing and please take care. Hopefully, a wonderful day awaits you.
Regards
Barry Penfold
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Lovely rhyming poem. I like your concept. Man follows time and animal follow senses. Thanks for sharing and please take care. Hopefully, a wonderful day awaits you.
Regards
Barry Penfold
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
Comment from dragonpoet
HI Pam,
This is a well written poem about time according to animals and according to humans. I like the simplicity of nature's time. Just eat sleep and play.
Time, or lack of it, seems to bring us stress. I am glad that the dogs keep the chickens safe. But I don't want the fox family to starve either.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a wonderful rest of the day and week.
Joan
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HI Pam,
This is a well written poem about time according to animals and according to humans. I like the simplicity of nature's time. Just eat sleep and play.
Time, or lack of it, seems to bring us stress. I am glad that the dogs keep the chickens safe. But I don't want the fox family to starve either.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a wonderful rest of the day and week.
Joan
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is a very cute and creative story/poem. I do hope you post the other poem you wrote in your younger years. I know they'll be fun to read. I can't wait.
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This is a very cute and creative story/poem. I do hope you post the other poem you wrote in your younger years. I know they'll be fun to read. I can't wait.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, A Fox's Time, presented with ten AABB-rhymed quatrains, compares in part the illusion of time which to men makes sense, and to the creatures who feed constantly a matter of opportunity.
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This poem, A Fox's Time, presented with ten AABB-rhymed quatrains, compares in part the illusion of time which to men makes sense, and to the creatures who feed constantly a matter of opportunity.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2024