The Christmas Baby
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Christmas Baby"Sam n Sarah get a baby with dire consequences
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Wow, this is stirring drama and so tragic that it's based on a true story. You immerse your reader from the start into a palpably emotional crisis in this couple's life and it's so fraught that we almost feel we shouldn't be there to witness it. Well done for hitting the ground running. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Wow, this is stirring drama and so tragic that it's based on a true story. You immerse your reader from the start into a palpably emotional crisis in this couple's life and it's so fraught that we almost feel we shouldn't be there to witness it. Well done for hitting the ground running. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 13-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Thanks Debbie. It's inspired by a true to life person I knew, but there is dramatic license taken.
Comment from lyenochka
What a gut-wrenching opening! This starts out with a bang as every good book should. We can immediately feel the pain of the couple in their loss, and it doesn't help to have an accusatory mother-in-law. Glad you are taking on this challenge!
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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What a gut-wrenching opening! This starts out with a bang as every good book should. We can immediately feel the pain of the couple in their loss, and it doesn't help to have an accusatory mother-in-law. Glad you are taking on this challenge!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thanks so much. I really appreciate what you said. I hope I'm not biting off more than I can chew with only a month. But I need the motivation.
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It's tough but it's worth a try. Its' like the NaPoWriMo but this is the Novel in a month and that requires a lot of energy!
Comment from royowen
Yes, it does seem like God is punishing he and his wife, and both his wife and his mother in law are ganging up on him, adding to his guilt and plundering his heart from hope and faith, I think anyone would be totally discouraged by this, well done Stan, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Yes, it does seem like God is punishing he and his wife, and both his wife and his mother in law are ganging up on him, adding to his guilt and plundering his heart from hope and faith, I think anyone would be totally discouraged by this, well done Stan, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thanks Roy!
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Most welcome
Comment from patcelaw
I wish you the very best in writing a book a month that would be quite a task and I wish you the very best and doing so. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you? It sounds like this book might be kind of a sad book, but I'm hoping that at the end there will be a glimmer of hope.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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I wish you the very best in writing a book a month that would be quite a task and I wish you the very best and doing so. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you? It sounds like this book might be kind of a sad book, but I'm hoping that at the end there will be a glimmer of hope.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thanks Pat!
Comment from BethShelby
This is off to a good start. I'm writing a book also listed as fiction, but it is a friend's story. I hope you can find the time to complete it in a month. I also hope you won't give up on the other one you are writing.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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This is off to a good start. I'm writing a book also listed as fiction, but it is a friend's story. I hope you can find the time to complete it in a month. I also hope you won't give up on the other one you are writing.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thanks Beth. Yes. I hope to put a western chapter out soon. I can't leave those characters hanging. They deserve more.
Comment from Julie Helms
What a heartbreaking start to your story. Though literarily speaking, it is a perfect intro to grab and hook the reader. You did a great job in such a short space bringing out the emotion and reaction among the different characters, and the interaction between them.
Some typos:
From your Background:
Sam when a seed of desparation burrows in his heart.
(desperation)
Sam Townes infant son passed away
(Towne's or Townes' depending on what his last name is.)
I hope to be able to follow along with your story.
Thanks!
Julie
:-)
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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What a heartbreaking start to your story. Though literarily speaking, it is a perfect intro to grab and hook the reader. You did a great job in such a short space bringing out the emotion and reaction among the different characters, and the interaction between them.
Some typos:
From your Background:
Sam when a seed of desparation burrows in his heart.
(desperation)
Sam Townes infant son passed away
(Towne's or Townes' depending on what his last name is.)
I hope to be able to follow along with your story.
Thanks!
Julie
:-)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2024
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Thanks Julie. And always appreciate editing help. Future installments may not be very clean due to the pressure to put out chapters.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have tears. This story is heartbreaking. You've done a great job writing this chapter. The emotion is strong as are the characters. I can't wait for more. You're brave attempting this contest. Writing a book on a month is hard. I can't do it. Best of luck
with carefully constructed words. "Don't blame yourself. (words,)
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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I have tears. This story is heartbreaking. You've done a great job writing this chapter. The emotion is strong as are the characters. I can't wait for more. You're brave attempting this contest. Writing a book on a month is hard. I can't do it. Best of luck
with carefully constructed words. "Don't blame yourself. (words,)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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I hope and pray enough of my outline is there to get to the finish line. This one is fueled with lots of emotion. I'm using a person who I knew had a rough life and yet never gave up. Just thinking of him makes me cry. Blessings ahead. Thanks for your love and support. Appreciate u.
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The emotion shone through with this post. I wish I had a six left, but this late in the week no way.