Danger is my business
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Running up the stairs"Most everything Mickey did was dangerous.
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Comment from samandlancelot
Hi Liz,
I enjoyed the "trouble" you and your siblings created with your imaginative playtime. You built up the curiosity and suspense well with the medicine bottle escapade.
I think you were with Mickey, but then you started using Nike in the same scene. Was that a mistake? Then you moved on to Nike's room. Are Mickey and Mike the brothers? Are they in separate scenes? (the confusion is the reason for the four stars. If you correct this, I'll change your rating.)
When that was carried out a fresh plan for another stickup could be formulated. (I had to read your last sentence several times to understand it. If you place a comma after 'carried out' it would help.)
Patricia
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Hi Liz,
I enjoyed the "trouble" you and your siblings created with your imaginative playtime. You built up the curiosity and suspense well with the medicine bottle escapade.
I think you were with Mickey, but then you started using Nike in the same scene. Was that a mistake? Then you moved on to Nike's room. Are Mickey and Mike the brothers? Are they in separate scenes? (the confusion is the reason for the four stars. If you correct this, I'll change your rating.)
When that was carried out a fresh plan for another stickup could be formulated. (I had to read your last sentence several times to understand it. If you place a comma after 'carried out' it would help.)
Patricia
Comment Written 18-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Nike, Mickey, and Mike are all the same person just had a lot of names. In his pre-whack days, he was Mickey. When he began recovering from his head injury he decided he wanted to be Mike.
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Since this is chapter 10, I suspect you already addressed the different names for Mickey. I'll raise your rating to 5 stars.
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His name before his head injury, was Mickey but then when he was recovering from his head injury he wanted to be Mike. It's like me I do not want to be Elizabeth i want to be Liz.
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Thank you for your consideration
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Things are ever changing and my brother's world so I have lots of fatter for writing
Comment from Rick Gardner
The trials and tribulations of raising children, some disaster is waiting too happen. They are the definition of entropy. Disorder prevails. Also the true form of birth control.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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The trials and tribulations of raising children, some disaster is waiting too happen. They are the definition of entropy. Disorder prevails. Also the true form of birth control.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2024
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Well written. Thank you for the involved review.
Comment from Lana Marie
Those were the days when we had the freedom to be creative in our playtime. Before all the gadgets and gadgets that everybody gets distracted with now. That was a fun thing for me to read as I lived in a hotel briefly as we moved from one house to another. Kids can get very mischievous and I was one of them. I used to stop the elevators in between floors and either climb up to the next floor or jump down to the one below. It never got me to visit a hospital, but it definitely could have.
Thank you for the read.
Happy writing,
Lana
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Those were the days when we had the freedom to be creative in our playtime. Before all the gadgets and gadgets that everybody gets distracted with now. That was a fun thing for me to read as I lived in a hotel briefly as we moved from one house to another. Kids can get very mischievous and I was one of them. I used to stop the elevators in between floors and either climb up to the next floor or jump down to the one below. It never got me to visit a hospital, but it definitely could have.
Thank you for the read.
Happy writing,
Lana
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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This makes a it sound a little like us. I see what you're saying you didn't have to visit the hospital but you could have. Well as you may have read a little earlier we did, & we have.
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Yes, I did read that hence why I had said that about me not visiting in the hospital, and yes, definitely could have gotten hurt. But as youngsters we don't seem to think about the possible dangers. 😊
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So accurate... Thank you for reading my chapter
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Liz, this is hilarious. I so enjoyed reading all the shenanigans you and your brother were up to. I wonder if your mother was tearing out her hair because of the two of you. Lol. I.loved the read. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Oh, Liz, this is hilarious. I so enjoyed reading all the shenanigans you and your brother were up to. I wonder if your mother was tearing out her hair because of the two of you. Lol. I.loved the read. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your delightful review I'm glad you enjoyed it so much.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It was an interesting story about the brown stuff in the bottle, but you didn't explain why your brother ended up in the hospital because of it. We didn't have any closets when I was three, just a rope hung across a corner of our two-room shack.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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It was an interesting story about the brown stuff in the bottle, but you didn't explain why your brother ended up in the hospital because of it. We didn't have any closets when I was three, just a rope hung across a corner of our two-room shack.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your interested review .The iodine went down in his eyes that's why I had to go to the hospital
Comment from lyenochka
What fun memories! I am glad you and your brother had such great imaginations and could act out those movies with your own stories. Your mom was so very tolerant! I don't think most kids would have gotten away with those antics!
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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What fun memories! I am glad you and your brother had such great imaginations and could act out those movies with your own stories. Your mom was so very tolerant! I don't think most kids would have gotten away with those antics!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your amusing review. Our mom just let us have a lot of fun she knew we liked the Cowboy shows so she went right along with it.
Comment from jim vecchio
I loved every second of this and wish I had six for you. We had a small pantry with three rows, and I often would climb up nd inspect the treasures there. My mom had an old can of "Mead's Dextri Maltose" in which she would put pennies and mementos. I loved bringing that down and inspecting it. Today, that is the only memento of hers that I have in my room, safe by my computer.
By the way, it is Whip Wilson and Lash LaRue.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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I loved every second of this and wish I had six for you. We had a small pantry with three rows, and I often would climb up nd inspect the treasures there. My mom had an old can of "Mead's Dextri Maltose" in which she would put pennies and mementos. I loved bringing that down and inspecting it. Today, that is the only memento of hers that I have in my room, safe by my computer.
By the way, it is Whip Wilson and Lash LaRue.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your amusing review also for the identification of whip and lash.
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I'm glad you have some good memories of them.
Comment from Teri7
Liz, This sounds like you and your siblings had a lot of fun growing up and playing robbers and things. You used very good descriptive words. I bet you all had a wonderful time. Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Liz, This sounds like you and your siblings had a lot of fun growing up and playing robbers and things. You used very good descriptive words. I bet you all had a wonderful time. Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
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you are so welcome! I enjoyed reading it! love and blessings, Teri
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you are so welcome! I enjoyed reading it! love and blessings, Teri
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
Memories always surprise us.... especially when we put them down on paper... No Annie, huh? Don't blame you there! ;) You and Mickey sound like y'all had some great (dangerous? yummy?) adventures... Thanx for sharing! ;)
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Memories always surprise us.... especially when we put them down on paper... No Annie, huh? Don't blame you there! ;) You and Mickey sound like y'all had some great (dangerous? yummy?) adventures... Thanx for sharing! ;)
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your amusing review. Right, no Annie... lol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing these memories. My brother was probably between three and four when he climbed on top of the refrigerator and ate a box of Exlax thinking it was chocolate. He shared it with our dog. LOl No, mom can't watch everything.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you for sharing these memories. My brother was probably between three and four when he climbed on top of the refrigerator and ate a box of Exlax thinking it was chocolate. He shared it with our dog. LOl No, mom can't watch everything.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your fun review.Good old xlax I think that fooled more than one kid.
